I Don't Believe In Ghosts, Radio Monologue Page 2

Jerf, you don't sound insulted when in an above post you say that you're sat at your computer ... laughing. That comment sheds light on your claims of insult and affrontery.

As to favourites, I've always treated you with deference and respect, and my tone has never been harsh, I nearly always use 'please' in my requests. As I said, I'm quite willing to discuss the differences between your crit and James' in private but I doubt neither of us would survive (or want to survive) the ordeal.

Let's get things straight. Immediately after you were called a knob in David's thread, I put up a reply with a line to tell ALL users that name calling will end. Now that's public and it applied to everyone.

That your posts are never rude ... shall I start quoting them?

I don't want other forum users having to wade through this cac so please PM me if you want to discuss it further.

Your opinion of my output, Jerf, is always valued.

Thanks, Paul and Matt. Sometimes I wonder.

Quote: David Bussell @ January 10, 2008, 6:28 PM

Also, I think you may need to look up the word "monologue".

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I thought the same thing.

Incidentally I started reading it then saw how long it was. I may go back to it sometime.

David When you saw how long it was, you may go back.
Somebody help me please,

I REALLY don't want you to think I'm picking on you, and it would be a shame if you left the board. I'm not at all. I honestly wasn't having a go at you in my initial critique. You seem to want to take offence. You make dubious and possibly insulting comments under the cloak of 'irony' - belittling those that 'don't get it', and yet cannot take honest and constructive criticism. Very confusing. I was defending you when I said you were playing the fool on purpose. I thought you were. You pretty much said you were. I don't like to join the bandwagon and gang up on anyone who's having a rough time. I've not been harsh to you at all. But you seem to want me, and everyone else to. Really I'd rather think you were winding us all up than think you have a complex of some sort!

And it's a bit of a cheap shot, I know, but they're right:
From Dictionary.com
Monologue
1.a form of dramatic entertainment, comedic solo, or the like by a single speaker: a comedian's monologue.
2.a prolonged talk or discourse by a single speaker, esp. one dominating or monopolizing a conversation.

If it's got more than one speaker it ain't a monologue.

And by the way I said Bussell was acting like a nob a while back. I didn't mean it in a harsh way, it's the sort of thing you'd say to someone down the pub (different to saying someone *is* a nob!) and I'm sure the same light sentiment was meant towards you. Looks different on the 'page' I suppose. But anyway the fact is that you have to take a breather and chill. There's a neologism for you, there.

I was laughing because some of the posts really are very funny.

At the end of the day it's up to you how you react to things. And if this is all a big wind-up you've just wasted 10 minutes of my life you master of schadenfreude!!

Quote: James Williams @ January 10, 2008, 8:30 PM

nob

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*knob

Where's your degree getting you now James, eh?! Haha

No, I thought he was very posh.
Honest.

You get a point - one for his nob!

My button doesn't wor , see.

Quote: James Williams @ January 10, 2008, 8:30 PM

I didn't mean it in a harsh way, it's the sort of thing you'd say to someone down the pub.

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Your local is lot more friendlier than mine.

Quote: ajp29 @ January 10, 2008, 8:43 PM

Your local is lot more friendlier than mine.

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We shot all the harsh people.

A very engaging story. I do actually mean Jerf's tale and not the punch-up!

Yes on the subject of the tale Jerf, I think it's a good one. I would urge you to re-write to refine it and consider all the critique to improve it further. If you can't see any room for improvement, get another writer you admire (if any!) to edit it for you and make suggestions for improvements (if they can see any). It's a good story and with polish I reckon you'd have opportunity to flog it as a magazine short story somewhere, or a radio play. If not, maybe the next one will be a goer. We live and learn!

Quote: Jerf Roberwitz @ January 10, 2008, 7:48 PM

If you all don't stop picking on me, I'll leave, and then where will you be.

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Less antagonised? Not having fair critique picked apart and entirely re-worded (donkey arse rape indeed) when the author doesn't like the CONSTRUCTIVE criticism he receives...?

Jerf, if you're going to post your work in the critique forum, expect critique. Don't expect everyone to praise it by default, and don't try and bait others to argue or have a go at you - 'cos that's my job.

Your behaviour continues to be antagonistic despite warnings. Please consider this to be your FINAL warning before account suspension.

Just sold the revised version, well not sold exactly, The bloke who,(or is it whom) runs the local hospital radio station, is going to read it to the patients,not the really scary bits of course, wouldn't want anybody dying of fright. Wish me luck.

Quote: James Williams @ January 10, 2008, 8:44 PM

We shot all the harsh people.

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Funniest line in this thread.

Well done, Jerf.
You'll have to pretend to be ill and get yourself admitted so that you can make everyone on the ward listen to it!!

Aaron Being Administrator does not give you the right to be wrong.
When filthy expessions are included in a critique, they are there as an insult, no matter what camoflage of wordage they are under. My critique may rely on cutting witty phrases, but at least they are not an excuse to use filthy language.I have never contested critique of my work . The problem lies with others contesting my critique of their's. If you examine the evidence you will see that I am the victim of extremely rude vitriol.