Lost sketch

EXT. DAY. ROAD.

A MAN IS DRIVING IN HIS CAR ALONG A ROAD.

HE SLOWS DOWN AND LOOKS AT A POSTER ON A TELEGRAPH POLE.

THERE IS A 'LOST' HEADLINE ON THE POSTER.

THE POSTER READS: 'LOST. A LEG HAS BEEN LOST IN THIS AREA AS A RESULT OF A CAR ACCIDENT. IT WAS A LEFT LEG AND IT WAS WEARING DENIM AND BROWN SHOES. IF YOU HAVE ANY INFORMATION REGARDING IT'S WHEREABOUTS. PLEASE CONTACT THE FOLLOWING NUMBER. TEL: 0800 101010'

MAN DRIVES OFF. HE TURNS ON HIS CAR RADIO.

RADIO VOICE:
Police are urging people to remain vigilant after a lost leg was said to be behind a spate of arse kicking attacks. The public are advised not to approach the leg as it is said to be armed and dangerous.

It's not really a sketch, is it? Unless you forgot to put in the second half?

Quote: Matthew Stott @ September 30 2011, 1:40 PM BST

It's not really a sketch, is it? Unless you forgot to put in the second half?

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Fair enough. Thanks for commenting.

I think I get it...and if I do, it really doesn't do it for me. Perhaps a more visual gag.

I liked it a lot, but maybe a bit too odd for a sketch. Add it to a weird sitcom idea

Thanks. I haven't wrote my oddball sitcom yet but I'm workng on it... I take it was too weird AJGO? No worries. I am but an amatuer.

It feels like we're missing a punchline here. The last like reads like there should be a pun there but there isn't. Maybe an alternative could be.

RADIO VOICE:
Police are urging people to remain vigilant after a lost leg was said to be hoping mad.

Also the guy driving his car along a road is unnecessary. Where's the incident with him?

Maybe you could end with the man continuing his journey to then see the leg "flashing a bit of skin" trying to hitch a lift.

Quote: Nigel Kelly @ October 1 2011, 1:57 AM BST

Thanks. I haven't wrote my oddball sitcom yet but I'm workng on it... I take it was too weird AJGO? No worries. I am but an amatuer.

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Not too weird, just feels like should be used as part of something larger, along with your Sock Puppet sketch. Hence the encouragement to write a weird sitcom. Lots of things take a while to find their home, and this and sock puppet I pictured whilst reading in a more twisted sitcom form rather than stand-alone sketches. Just my interpretation though, of course write whatever the hell you like

Sorry I have missed the punchline? 'armed and dangerous' a leg?, a bit confusing.

Quote: AJGO @ October 1 2011, 10:20 AM BST

Not too weird, just feels like should be used as part of something larger, along with your Sock Puppet sketch. Hence the encouragement to write a weird sitcom. Lots of things take a while to find their home, and this and sock puppet I pictured whilst reading in a more twisted sitcom form rather than stand-alone sketches. Just my interpretation though, of course write whatever the hell you like

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Thanks AJGO, you're a good spud. Have a nice sunny 29C day in London.

Quote: dellas @ October 1 2011, 10:45 AM BST

Sorry I have missed the punchline? 'armed and dangerous' a leg?, a bit confusing.

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It's like a sketch a person who has a short attention span and issues with impulsivity would post Dellas. Down with this sort of thing

Thats OK then!, for a minute I thought you meant me!

(if the cap fits..)

Quote: Leevil @ October 1 2011, 4:16 AM BST

Maybe an alternative could be.

RADIO VOICE:
Police are urging people to remain vigilant after a lost leg was said to be hoping (sic) mad.

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The sketch certainly needs something extra. Not sure a 70-year-old pun is the answer, though.

I am in a really good mood!

Hows about 'Dangerous, likely to stick the boot in'?

It's a great idea poorly explained.

I'd say try and do it with out dialogue, I mean it's a reversal of the old clawed psycho ghost story isn't it?

Agree with Sooty, great idea.
I think if he had parked his car for whatever reason, got out, sees the poster, then feels a kick in the arse, turns and noone there, then gets back in the car to hear the radio announcement?