Thing about critique is it's a bit like a bee hive.
Treat it nicely and you get the honey, poke it with a stick and you get stung.
Lots of writers here have grown and improved through using it including me. If it's going back to used for that, then I for one am most pleased.
You've got 2 interesting characters there. So tell me what does Cidre and co think about the sentencing for the riots?
Quote: sootyj @ August 20 2011, 11:37 AM BSTI'd say if you're serious ask yourself the 3 following questions
1.How would an MP loot a shop?
2.Why would an MP loot a shop?
3.What would they steal?
4.How would they get away with it?
Shame you can't steal GCSEs, eh?
I kid, I kid . . .
Hey Jack what do you want Steve Jobs to give you for Christmas?
Quote: Jack Daniels @ August 20 2011, 11:59 AM BSTI kid, I kid . . .
Paedo
Quote: AJGO @ August 20 2011, 11:55 AM BST'Just a few' line doesn't scan
It does when you swing it, or syncopate if you prefer, on the possessive bling's line.
And yes you must keep at it Dellas!
When the glass breaks
When the till rings
When the loot's had
I simply remember I've nicked lovely things
And then I don't feel so bad.
Quote: Jack Daniels @ August 20 2011, 11:59 AM BSTShame you can't steal GCSEs, eh?
I kid, I kid . . .
Jack why don't you put something on critique? you have a knack for 'lateral thinking' sort of crazy abstract stuff, it would be good to see it!
Quote: Marc P @ August 20 2011, 12:05 PM BSTIt does when you swing it, or syncopate if you prefer, on the possessive bling's line.
You syncopating hypocrite 
Quote: dellas @ August 20 2011, 12:25 PM BSTJack why don't you put something on critique? you have a knack for 'lateral thinking' sort of crazy abstract stuff, it would be good to see it!
Cos he's a big chicken
bwark bwark bwark
Quote: AJGO @ August 20 2011, 12:25 PM BST
You syncopating hypocrite
Sing it for me and stick it up on YouTube!
Quote: Marc P @ August 20 2011, 12:32 PM BSTSing it for me and stick it up on YouTube!
Don't think enough bandwidth exists for the complete criticised works of AJGO's stunningly syncopated song sections
I would move on from looting, as a topic, but keep posting sketches as the ideas hit you. That's the thing with news-related sketches and stand up, it dates badly although the structures/themes can be re-jigged and updated with each passing news event.
Quote: dellas @ August 20 2011, 12:25 PM BSTJack why don't you put something on critique? you have a knack for 'lateral thinking' sort of crazy abstract stuff, it would be good to see it!
I've put stuff up before. Here's some sketches for you to peek at.
https://www.comedy.co.uk/forums/thread/21509/ https://www.comedy.co.uk/forums/thread/21681/ https://www.comedy.co.uk/forums/thread/21638/ https://www.comedy.co.uk/forums/thread/21557/ https://www.comedy.co.uk/forums/thread/22074/
These were some comp entries, check out the proverbial tumbleweed that blows past each and every one...
https://www.comedy.co.uk/forums/thread/22005/ https://www.comedy.co.uk/forums/thread/21911/ https://www.comedy.co.uk/forums/thread/21774/ https://www.comedy.co.uk/forums/thread/21572/ https://www.comedy.co.uk/forums/thread/21661/ https://www.comedy.co.uk/forums/thread/21491/ - This is my fave I ever wrote. Still gives me a chuckle. Sadly I chuckled alone.
Quote: Jack Daniels @ August 20 2011, 3:21 PM BSThttps://www.comedy.co.uk/forums/thread/21491/ - This is my fave I ever wrote. Still gives me a chuckle. Sadly I chuckled alone.
I remember that one and liked it, bit odd to think of E.T. as a sex pest though!
Ones that are not voted for on Skit Comp are not necessarily unfunny, it's just that we've got to choose one, I usually like more than the one I've voted for, I'd say the same goes for everyone else on there.