Franke, I accept now ,that not only is proper format easier to read, it's easier to write
Roscoff, I am going that way, Chunky being found in different places, nobody sure whether Sammy had left him there or had he got there by himself.It might turn from a comedy( yes, so called) to a murder mystery. Some famous writer said, when he wrote a book, he never knew how it would end. I'd love some more input.
I've got to admit I'm seeing it more as one of the those old 'Black Comedy' dramas they used to have on. Lasted an hour. Dark humour full of murky under-currents!
Too good for modern telly audiences of course.. 
I aspire to do something like 'The Singing Detective'... did you like that?
Btw I've got another sketch to throw into the pot.. follows.. shortly!
Hey, this is just work in progress - we are creating whatever this is on a public forum so hey ho.. I want to pursue the Len Oliver and Fred relationship a bit.
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INT. COMMUNAL LOUNGE.
LEN OLIVER (A SUFERER OF VARIOUS DISEASES INCL. PARKINSONS & MEMORY LOSS) IS SAT IN A CHAIR LOOKING ENTHUSIASTICALLY AT THE CAMERA AND GESTURING TOWARDS ANOTHER CHAIR OPPOSITE HIM.
LEN OLIVER:
Well, she’s here then!
POV AUDIENCE. ON THE CHAIR WE SEE A DIRTY OLD MOP UPRIGHT IN A BUCKET.
POV PETE. PETE SEES AN HER MAJESTY THE QUEEN LOOK-ALIKE IN ALL HER REGAL FINERY WITH CROWN.
LEN OLIVER:
I’m so glad you answered my advert, Ma’am. Have you been lonely long?
THE QUEEN:
Well, I … do you think I could use your lavatory?
LEN OLIVER:
You know, I really think we could… lavatory? Yes of course, Ma’am. The bathroom’s over there… (GESTURES TO A DOOR) don’t use the soap mind, it’s Imperial Leather and ‘Residents only’, but make your-self at home otherwise…
POV LEN OLIVER. LEN SEES HER MAJESTY NOD, GET UP AND GO TO THE BATHROOM, OPEN THE DOOR AND GO IN.
POV AUDIENCE. WE SEE THE MOP AND BUCKET STILL “SAT” IN THE CHAIR.
FRED COMES THROUGH THE LOUNGE AND APPROACHES THE BATHROOM DOOR AND GOES TO TRY THE HANDLE BUT LEN CALLS OUT AND STOPS HIM.
LEN OLIVER:
It’s occupied Fred, she’s in there…
FRED PAUSES, FIDGETS, THEN SPOTS THE MOP AND BUCKET IN THE CHAIR AND COMES OVER TO LEN.
FRED:
What’s that mop and bucket doing in my chair, Len?
LEN OLIVER (LOOKING AT THE MOP PUZZLED):
God, I don’t know Fred, I can't remember...
FRED (SHAKES HEAD):
The Amazing Memory Man from Barnsley..
POV LEN. HE SEES THE MOP AND BUCKET. POV AUDIENCE, WE SEE HER MAJESTY THE QUEEN. LEN GETS UP AND PULLS THE QUEEN UP BY THE ARM.
LEN OLIVER (NODDING TOWARDS BATHROOM):
Let’s put this dirty old mop somewhere out of the way before she comes out… give me a hand, Fred…
THE QUEEN (POSH AT FIRST THEN PUT ON COCKNEY ACCENT)
Oh, I say… well, really… ooo, mind me jools…
LEN AND FRED MANHANDLE THE PROTESTING QUEEN AND PUT HER INTO A NEARBY CLEANERS CUPBOARD. THEY RETURN TO FIND THE MOP AND BUCKET STILL IN THE CHAIR.
FRED:
F**k you Len, you’ve always been a waste of my time.
END OF SCENE.
Dare I ask FRANKE, What was Len Oliver's stage act, what does POV mean
POV = point of view
Len Olivers stage act ... not sure, he's not my character ...
*nips back to have a look at the thread*
He's Johnnyd's character from way back in thread and he's Fred's arch enemy according to Matron. So to start tying characters and plot together... What was Fred's stage act and why is Len his arch enemy? That might help us decide what Len's stage act is, if only I could remember!
We could make him forgetful and he could have been 'Len - The Amazing Memory Man from Barnsley'.. ??? He is a Yorkie!
I've amended the sketch above to reflect that (for now)
Maybe Len shagged Elsie way back when... ???
Fred of course being one of your characters Jerf:
Retired husband and wife comedy duo, Judge and Dury? Real names, Fred and Elsie Mason. Living in retirement home filled with other 'artists'. The dialogue in the home always hovering between reality and their acts.
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The sketch with the queen in Jerf is experimental - I don't know if it is funny or not... it may not fit... I tend to put stuff in try it out, take it out again etc. as I am developing the characters. All in a days jest!! 
I'll print it off and collate
Jerf - you might want to think about asking those contributors (and any others) that you'd like to work on this project to get involved and then do it off-line at some point...
Just a thought geezer! 
There is merit in this idea of yours Jerf in my opinion!
But I am unpublished and what do I know...
I've just sold one of my sketches to somebody called Rocky Gervais
So wish me luck.
Quote: Jerf Roberwitz @ January 7, 2008, 7:09 PMI've just sold one of my sketches to somebody called Rocky Gervais
So wish me luck.
has the cheque cleared yet?
LEN OLIVER:
Fred, can I pay you by Czech?
FRED:
Are you up the Pole, Len?
Quote: Frankie Rage @ January 7, 2008, 7:21 PM
LEN OLIVER:
Fred, can I pay you by Czech?FRED:
Are you up the Pole, Len?
LEN OLIVER:
Me cousin from Prague is over Fred, I say, me cousin from, where is it again? yes Prague, is over.
FRED:
What did he work at Len?
LEN:
He were a boss of a see saw factory.
FRED:
Will he be able to pay me?
LEN:
Well Fred, I bloody hope so. But its a question of Czechs and balances when he's around.
INT. COMMUNAL LOUNGE.
FRED AND LEN ARE WATCHING A CHELSEA MATCH ON THE TELLY.
FRED:
Me sister'll be over from the South of France next week..
LEN:
Nice?
FRED:
No, she's a cow..
LEN:
I've got family in Cowes..
FRED:
I'd herd that but I think we've milked this dry, Len
LEN (whispers):
Your Elsie sure was a damn good shag in bed..
FRED:
What's that Len?
LEN:
Chelsea scored after the linesmans flag, Fred..
FRED:
..still it's a game of two halves..
LEN (whispers):
..still she's got a lovely arse..
FRED:
That's what I just said! You're a forgetful old 'Amazing Memory Man from Barnsley!' Len..
Quote: Frankie Rage @ January 4, 2008, 11:00 AMI like it ... but what about spelling it:
I thank yow!
(didn't Arthur Askey say it that way?)
"Ahthankyoo"
There's a speck of dust in my eye
Oh there it is, look .
Jerf... have you abandoned this meisterwerk then???
Frankie xxx
Franke. No I haven't, but there are approx 40 pages, I'm still struggling with the printing off. when I've done that, what do you think to the whole thing being posted back on site,(without the critique) To fill in the gaps.
Aaron, Would such a thing be possible and allowed?
Can't see a problem with it. Just cut and paste the relevant bits into one reply.