Mum and daughter

INT. DAY. HOME.

Woman is in the kitchen and her daughter (10) is in living room after school.

MUM: (shouting from kitchen) What was school like today Stacey?
STACEY: Hell!
MUM: Why what were you doing?
STACEY: Lego.
MUM: Lego? 10 year olds building lego. What teacher made you do that?
STACEY: Goebbels.
MUM: (laughing). Oh the German guy. Who gave him that nickname?
STACEY: Lee.
MUM: He’s a quiet boy isn’t he?
STACEY: Gigolo.
MUM: You’re too young to know about the birds and the..
STACEY: (interrupting).. bees.
MUM: You’re not very talkative today Stacey, is there anything wrong?
STACEY: Boobless.
MUM: Stacey, I don’t want you talking about this type of thing ok!
MUM WALKS INTO LIVING ROOM AND SEES STACEY ON SOFA.
STACEY: Here, mum, look at this (hands her mum a calculator)
MUM: 55378, what’s that mean?
STACEY: No, upside down.
MUM: Oh (pauses) bless.

ENDS.

This is a clever idea. Very nice

Bit too protracted for my liking. Too 'clever', not that funny - really a little laboured, IMHO.

Maybe I'd prefer it if there were more obvious 'jokes' in the main body... I do think the ending is quite neat.

And do they live in 50337?

Andy

Quote: Andy Kitching @ January 6, 2008, 8:18 PM

And do they live in 50337?

Andy

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...LEEOS?
...?

Haha, 0 doesn't mean D!

On a calculator it does look a bit like one though! I actually remember a lesson in primary school about putting funny words in calculators! Yeh, it was a great school!

I AM TO DARN DENSE TO GET IT.

Clever and interesting but not the biggest laugh, I'm sorry to say. That was most probably me turning my laptop upside down to check it out!!
Great idea, though, mate. Lots of potential.

Clever idea.

31773

Thanks for feedback, it could need some extra 5376616.

Quote: marion @ January 6, 2008, 11:12 PM

Clever and interesting but not the biggest laugh, I'm sorry to say. That was most probably me turning my laptop upside down to check it out!!
Great idea, though, mate. Lots of potential.

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Me too

Clever sketch, not LOL but raised a smile.

My head hurts. This reminds me of that Pii film ( to quote Father Ted 'Not alot of people have seen it so its probably a bad reference)

I would change it a bit. have the child say increasingly bad things then have him show the mum the calculator, she thinks its going to say boobs but its says bless. then you can either end it there or have the child go 'Its meant to say boobs'

!54307708

I thought it was nice gentle humour. Might fit into 'Outnumbered' that cheesy kiddy sitcom that was on recently!

Cheesy is my new word at the mo.

Not meaning to be derogatory Nige ... it's a good piece of writing!

Hi Nigel

Agree with Frankie here, could see it fitting into Outnumbered around some other 'happenings' rather than as a standalone sketch by itself.

Dan