British Comedy Guide

Billy Conkers' Circus

BILLY CONKERS HAS BROUGHT THE TROUPE TOGETHER FOR AN URGENT MEETING.

BC:
I'm sorry to have to bring you all here like this but as you know times are tough. So tough in fact that folks are even cutting back on essentials such as Circuses.

Bobby:
We're not ging to be fired are we?

BC:
Well you are, but that's your job, we've just bought a new Cannon. But alas it's true I will have to let one of the acts go.

Julia:
(Starts To Cry)
It's not going to be me is it.

BC:
The lovely Julia? My Princess, My Flower, My Petal Of course not. Don't be silly and wipe those tears off your beard.

Eddie:
Well who will it be then? Because if it's me I'm not taking the Elephant

BC:
Eddie you're safe, same goes for Larry the Lion Tamer, all of the animal acts. And as for that sad looking fellow over there with the red nose & the big feet! Come here you.

Fellow:
But I don't work here!

BC:
In that case take my card., .

Anthony:
It's going to be me isn't it.

BC:
SIGHS
You've got to admit Tony, how can I put this nicely? Amazing Anthony the Astounding Accountant hasn't really caught on in the way we'd hoped.

Anthony:
It's just the wrong audience, it takes a bit of enjoyable study before you can really appreciate the danger of the balance sheet or the giddy thrill of the unexpected journal entry.

BC:
It's very impressive in an administrative kind of way, but it's just not very circussy

Julia:
That thing he does with P45's is pretty exciting

BC:
No that is very good I'll give you that..

Anthony:
Come on! Pick a spreadsheet.

BC:
Hey you're not getting round me with the old "find the year end reconciliation" trick. I'm sorry to say that your act is not the kind of thing that sells tickets.

Anthony:
Oh well I suppose this is goodbye then.

BC:
The Circus life isn't for everyone Tony

Anthony:
No hard feelings Billy. I'll just have to go back to my old job at the knife throwing Factory.

The very first line is a gem.

Excellent...I loved the 'wipe those tears off your beard' line :D

I do like this. There are some really nice, very funny lines in here.

I'm not entirely sure about the accountant bit at the end though. Could you have him and the accountant deciding on who should be fired? Then the reveal could be the accountant appearing in the big top and finishing with the 'Go on, pick a spreadsheet' line?

I agree. It's good until the main bit that it's actually about, but Ishy's suggestion keeps it together and is a better resolution. HR would need to be involved too - who does HR at a circus?

I'd love to see the accountant actually doing his act in the circus. I think that in itself would be funny enough.

Quote: Badge @ August 6 2011, 12:51 AM BST

who does HR at a circus?

Presumably the clowns, same as everywhere else.

I am with the consensus on this, great intro, but a so-so central conceit, at least in its current form. Something to work with though.

It's good but knife throwing is a little badumtish

Steve are we the only people privilleged to partake of your genius?

Quote: sootyj @ August 6 2011, 11:11 AM BST

Steve are we the only people privilleged to partake of your genius?

Don't sell out bro! Stay underground!

;)

Quote: Timbo @ August 6 2011, 11:07 AM BST

great intro, but a so-so central conceit, at least in its current form. Something to work with though.

Agree with Timbo.

But as ever, some great lines in there :D

Wonderful. Boy, you can write.....and you're proper funny as well.

Thanks all.
Some good feedback there.

It's a very funny sketch until the end, which doesn't quite work, and the last line is awful, because it wrenches you away from the skit with it's unreality - what exactly is a "knife throwing factory"? It makes no sense, but I'm sure you can sort it, because it's too good to waste.

Actually I had the same reaction to the knife-throwing factory line; if you can find a more satisfying out then the accountancy stuff might work. As it is it feels like it is going somewhere but then just falls apart.

I think the problem I had here was that the idea in my mind was someone from an exciting background running away to become a Circus Accountant.
And then when I started I was having more fun with the intro than anything else.
I'll keep it though, & look if there's a better way of doing it at a later date.

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