The Boxer. Page 2

Cheers guys.
Although I'm not sure about the term ultra light, I was hoping for tears at the end. like Million Dollar baby or Police Academy 5

And I'm not sure it was that repetetive. I think the flaws probably lay elsewhere.

Quote: Corey O'Graffor @ July 19 2011, 6:52 PM BST

It was ultra light but nice enough. Your sketches always seem to be quite radio friendly, is that a conscious thing?

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Not concious no, but I ike dialogue sketches, so I probably do more that don't need to neccessarily be visual.

It's a contender. I laughed out loud at the coma line.

Quote: Steve Sunshine @ July 19 2011, 11:05 PM BST

Cheers guys.
Although I'm not sure about the term ultra light, I was hoping for tears at the end. like Million Dollar baby or Police Academy 5

And I'm not sure it was that repetetive. I think the flaws probably lay elsewhere.

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I don't think it was flawed but I know Glen 'The Boxer' Floyd will be! Sorry back to Larks with me!

PS I don't think I'd change anything, it works.

Fraaaadrian!

It was okay but I ruined it on my first read by not realizing there is three characters in conversation. I agree with comments on your description of ACTION and the SCENE. Maybe get into the habit of being more visual? Luckily though, most of your writing is slick enough to hit the ground running.

This would work great live. The guy in gloves and the two interjecting would give it a real energy I think.

That's really funny!

Nice sketch as always Mr S