British Comedy Guide

Costume Drama

INT. BEDROOM.

SCENE 1: A MAN AND WOMAN ARE LYING IN BED.

MAN:
You know the way you were talking about dressing up to make love, I've got a surprise for you.

WOMAN:
Not the fireman's outfit where you rescue me from standing on the sofa and then proceed to make love whilst uttering juvenile innuendo about your fireman's hose?

MAN:
No, no, no... you'll love this one, I thought we could do it dressed as a pantomime horse.

WOMAN:
A pantomime horse? Where did you hear about having sex in one of those? Are you having an affair?

MAN:
No, chill, chill... You'll be the front of the horse, then I take you from behind. Come on, let's give it a go?

THE MAN LIFTS UP A BAG AND TAKES OUT THE PANTO HORSE COSTUME.

SCENE 2: THE COUPLE ARE DRESSED AS THE PANTOMIME HORSE

MAN:
Right, this is proving to be a tad tricky. My head is at your arse, for starters.

WOMAN:
Mount me then, it'll look like a pantomime camel but who cares?

MAN:
Ok... let the frolics commence.

WOMAN:
Hurry up, I haven't got all day.

MAN:
Next time I do this, I'll be wearing night vision goggles... Aha!, I've docked. Yeah, we're doing it rodeo style baby!

WOMAN:
That's my armpit you imbecile.... Looks like I'm going to have to guide you in, as usual... Now, where is it? Where is it?

MAN:
It's behind you!

Not bad, but way too long for a stinker of a punch (lovable stinker granted)

Quote: Nigel Kelly @ May 28 2011, 9:32 PM BST

WOMAN:
Not the fireman's outfit where you rescue me from standing on the sofa and then proceed to make love whilst uttering juvenile innuendo about your fireman's hose?

WOMAN:
A pantomime horse? Where did you hear about having sex in one of those? Are you having an affair?

I think the womans dialogue is too clunky, see above for examples.

You seem to have shoehorned in a couple of jokes but they're not quite natural , I think the idea of the husband getting the dressing up idea wrong is a good 'un, but this needs a trim.

Yeah, its too long and needs shortened.. Cue predictable gag about the size of my penis.. When I did stand up I made up a story about having sex in unusual places and mentioned the panto horse scenario. I used the 'its behind you' punchline and it went down well. So maybe its more suited to that arena rather than on the page. Thanks for honest feedback boys and girls.

I found it amusing, but like the others said it could do without some of the dialogue, perhaps from scene 1. Scene 2 flows a lot better and the image it conjures up is very funny.

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