Hi guys,
Looking for a bit of advice - which (if any) of these is worth submitting?
Funny in 15 Seconds entries Page 2
Weeellllllll I think the first one is delivered better but that being said...
Quote: David Bussell @ March 23 2011, 10:19 AM GMTHi guys,
Looking for a bit of advice - which (if any) of these is worth submitting?
I have just watched both of them whilst on my lunch half an hour and the first one really made me laugh. 
I think the first one is phrased a lot better, second one maybe too long.
Just to be contrary, I actually like the second one better.
But then I did watch that one first. Might have made a difference.
Thanks for the input, guys.
Another one here. Let me know what you think.
Quote: David Bussell @ March 23 2011, 4:47 PM GMTAnother one here. Let me know what you think.
This one did nothing for me... and the other two are no longer available 
Did something for me. The second part joke, for me, didn't really kick on - but the shock of the initial reveal was ace. Funny stuff. Personally I'd try to work a punchline to that bit rather than the extra stuff.
Sorry - hard to be concise without **SPOILERS**
Quote: Flavian @ March 23 2011, 8:56 PM GMTDid something for me. The second part joke, for me, didn't really kick on - but the shock of the initial reveal was ace. Funny stuff. Personally I'd try to work a punchline to that bit rather than the extra stuff.
Sorry - hard to be concise without **SPOILERS**
I've cracked your code. You mean when the giraffe enters shot? **SPOILERS BEFORE THIS POINT**
Just saw physical defect, very good, made me laugh 
Perhaps could have held a second longer at the end to revel in Chopz's horrified face.
Quote: random @ March 23 2011, 7:29 PM GMTThis one did nothing for me... and the other two are no longer available
Cheers for taking a look. Here's the other one you were looking for...
http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=rplf_8ltwww
Quote: Flavian @ March 23 2011, 8:56 PM GMTDid something for me. The second part joke, for me, didn't really kick on - but the shock of the initial reveal was ace. Funny stuff. Personally I'd try to work a punchline to that bit rather than the extra stuff.
Sorry - hard to be concise without **SPOILERS**
Thanks for the focus, buddy.
Quote: ShoePie @ March 23 2011, 11:44 PM GMTJust saw physical defect, very good, made me laugh
Unfortunately "a second longer" isn't an option as entries have to be exactly 15 seconds in length. Given the amount that's going on I'm amazed Stuart managed to edit it down to a coherent sketch at all.
Quote: ShoePie @ March 23 2011, 11:44 PM GMTJust saw physical defect, very good, made me laugh
There is a longer, slightly better version that does that very thing, but as David says, to squeeze it into fifteen seconds, it had to be cut tight.
Dave, I enjoyed cross conversations. One thing I like about your sketches is that you both come across as likeable guys, too.
Chopz does. Bussell just looks a twat.