Lol. Fair enough.
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Very enjoyable read Marc. Nice one. 
Cheers DD. 
Really well written, mostly amusing rather than funny but builds up to a very funny ending. I think you needed to have some funnier bits earlier on to catch the judges eye.
Really loved -
"Haven't you read the Potter books, George?"
"Yeah, I read Mrs Tiggiewinkle"
Absolutely hated the frigid/virgin queen bit of dialogue - any self-respecting female would just tell him to F*** off.
Quote: Shirl the Whirl @ March 22 2011, 10:31 AM GMTReally well written, mostly amusing rather than funny but builds up to a very funny ending. I think you needed to have some funnier bits earlier on to catch the judges eye.
Really loved -
"Haven't you read the Potter books, George?"
"Yeah, I read Mrs Tiggiewinkle"Absolutely hated the frigid/virgin queen bit of dialogue - any self-respecting female would just tell him to F*** off.
Hi Shirl, thanks a lot for that. The virgin queen stuff needs expanding I guess as this is the story really. Jack has a crush on Tanya but won't admit it, so he pretends he is Jack the lad up to all sorts and Tanya takes a high moral tone, at the end of the ep Jack discovers that Tanya in fact slept with her best friends husband on her wedding day - so it's a bit of a reversal story really - although of course she didn't actually sleep with him and we have an emotional pay off with the reconciliation of the two friends. So you are right she would just tell him to f off - but the high moral tone sets up the fall - and I guess Jack is being deliberately provocative, Carol undercuts it by showing the audience that Jack is making it all up and has a thing for her. Maybe the tone needs looking at - I will revisit.
Thanks again.
Marc
Quote: chipolata @ March 21 2011, 11:59 AM GMTOn the bomb-sitcom front, wasn't Basil Fawlty inspired by a guy who threw Eric Idle's briefcase out in the street because he thought it contained a bomb?
Donald Sinclair. Put the case outside by his garden wall because he heard Idle's alarm clock ticking inside. Cleese used the name Donald Sinclair for his casino boss character in Rat Race.
Quote: Kenneth @ March 22 2011, 10:56 AM GMTRat Race.
*shudders*
I just thought I'd look up dogging Marc and this was the answer
### Dogging is a British English euphemism for engaging in sexual acts in a public or semi-public place or watching others doing so ####
So dogging was in the right sense in my sitcom
Quote: bushbaby @ March 22 2011, 6:41 PM GMTI just thought I'd look up dogging Marc and this was the answer
### Dogging is a British English euphemism for engaging in sexual acts in a public or semi-public place or watching others doing so ####
So dogging was in the right sense in my sitcom
Not really BB, Do some more research... not literally of course.
Quote: Griff @ March 22 2011, 6:06 PM GMTMarc out of interest why have you chosen 'Cottaging' as a title? A serious question. It's a single-entendre word that only means "to perform homosexual acts in a public toilet". (I just checked the OED page http://english.oxforddictionaries.com/view/entry/m_en_gb0183260#m_en_gb0183260 which gives the fantastic usage "It can even be configured to send you a text message if sensors detect cottaging in the disabled toilets.")
I know your setting is a cottage hospital, but would you call a sitcom about fell-walkers "Felching" just to get a laugh on the title page? (Admittedly this is a very poor example). There's going to be a lot of disappointed Daily Mail readers tuning in looking for some gayness to complain about.
I pitched it at the level of the comedy intelligence of the competition judges. 
Quote: Marc P @ March 22 2011, 7:14 PM GMTNot really BB, Do some more research... not literally of course.
Well, that's what they were all doing when I walked across Hampstead Heath one Saturday eve 
Quote: Griff @ March 22 2011, 6:06 PM GMTMarc out of interest why have you chosen 'Cottaging' as a title? A serious question. It's a single-entendre word that only means "to perform homosexual acts in a public toilet". (I just checked the OED page http://english.oxforddictionaries.com/view/entry/m_en_gb0183260#m_en_gb0183260 which gives the fantastic usage "It can even be configured to send you a text message if sensors detect cottaging in the disabled toilets.")
I thought Id heard that expression before and I remember now where...I was getting on the bus a few years ago in London and this man was getting off, he was a bit strange looking and as he got off he shouted to no one in particuliar ' I used to go cottaging, now I go cottaging for Jesus' stuck in my mind that did!
Quote: Griff @ March 22 2011, 9:17 PM GMTWas the bus stop at Lambeth Palace?
Quote: Griff @ March 22 2011, 9:17 PM GMTWas the bus stop at Lambeth Palace?
I don't get that one 
It's the Archbishop of Canterbury's London HQ BB.
Quote: Marc P @ March 23 2011, 8:28 AM GMTIt's the Archbishop of Canterbury's London HQ BB.