It's at the bottom of my laundry basket, Ive been to busy in the forums they are addictive, Ive changed the name from Bin to Prince after Prince Hamed, I could swap him with Hans the supervisor as his the old man at 55 both Prince and Diehard are about 30, Hans could be really put out with Prince pushing him around at his age and with his experience, could make Prince some fresh faced university graduate on a managerial scheme ?
What you're doing there, is sacrificing character for scenario. If you're willing to give up on the main concept on the comedy, then why not just write something different?
Why not just give your characters some room to talk first, no scenario, then put them into a scenario that fits them.
I did this with one of my characters, quite articulate and pompous but I painted myself into a corner with the setting and hard to rewrite the concept from scratch once I'd thought of a better area.
Think about this, the throwing around of baggage or maybe even finding something unusual and speculating about what it is/contents are is good for maybe two episodes but most sitcoms run for six episodes a series. What are you going to do for the rest of your series? Your characters are in a pretty controlled environment after all.
Quote: Nat Wicks @ March 10 2011, 1:41 PM GMTWhat you're doing there, is sacrificing character for scenario. If you're willing to give up on the main concept on the comedy, then why not just write something different?
Hi Nat, the main concept of this for me was to stick a Asian Muslim in baggage handling, I think that's unusual and ripe for situation I could make him the supervisor without losing the theme as everyone's pointed out I have to be careful to portray him in a good light, its his compatriots that cast aspersions and are to ready to stereotype, I know he reaches his dream to become a pilot in the last episode but he keeps crashing in the simulator which hinders his progress through the episodes.
Thanks for your comments and interest.
Fair enough.
Also my last post reads a lot harsher than was intended!
I thinkthat's good shows your actually interested and offering a different view, since I posted the few pages Ive had to rethink things what with all the comments and I see it as a positive because I really didn't see some of the things you guys have been telling me , I spoke to Bushbaby about finding a group so I can get stuff read out as I just sit alone and read it 10 times and become so bored I throw it all out and the process happens all over again.
Im not precious about it as long as its helpful bring it on.
Quote: sean knight @ March 10 2011, 1:46 PM GMTWhy not just give your characters some room to talk first, no scenario, then put them into a scenario that fits them.
I did this with one of my characters, quite articulate and pompous but I painted myself into a corner with the setting and hard to rewrite the concept from scratch once I'd thought of a better area.
Think about this, the throwing around of baggage or maybe even finding something unusual and speculating about what it is/contents are is good for maybe two episodes but most sitcoms run for six episodes a series. What are you going to do for the rest of your series? Your characters are in a pretty controlled environment after all.
Hello mate, I only have three episodes as that's what the comp wanted but Ive written two thirds of episode 2 and have three in bits until I write the third I can't see where it will take me, I think there are loads of things that can happen in that area they have access to ground crew so can introduce the odd character such as fuel loaders, pest controllers, aircraft cleaning teams etc..... who knows.