Hey guys and gals. Been looking over my script and I found out what areas Need work. Besids it all 
Below are a list of things I need help with. Could you maybe throw in some funny suggestions that might help.
1.adverts
2.football
3.Condoms and Sex/relationships
4.The Gym
5.Public transport
6.Cars
My new set needs some work too. So I am working on it.
Not trying to sounds like a dick, but as you're so young and new to the game (like myself) you might be best off trying to find your own inspiration rather than getting it from others. Write about what you know, and work on it constantly. Write it. Rewrite it. Try it. Rewrite it. Shower, rinse, repeat.
At this stage however had you want to be writing your own stuff. Or else you want have ownership of it.
Have you thought of maybe doing a writing or standup course?
That or just start writing your own jokes.
Set up "My Dog has no nose"
Expand "How does he smell?"
Twist expectation "Awful"
then add more details to the background to humanise it.
there's also exageration
Set up "Yo mama"
Expand "Is so fat"
Exagerate "Her blood type is ragu."
Do about 20 gags and the personalise them and your away. But as I said to you before trawl through the performance and critique threads for hints.
And of course there's also antijokes, puns etc. Maybe try reading Jimmy Carr's the naked jape.
That or shout father f**ker alot and make dated playground jokes about black peoples willies and the disabled.[/quote]
Quote: Darren Taylor @ January 4 2011, 3:16 AM GMTHey guys and gals. Been looking over my script and I found out what areas Need work. Besids it all
Below are a list of things I need help with. Could you maybe throw in some funny suggestions that might help.
1.adverts
2.football
3.Condoms and Sex/relationships
4.The Gym
5.Public transport
6.Cars
The best way to milk a forum for gags and ideas is to start a thread in General about the area you want stuff in. And be sure to contribute to other threads and take part, otherwise we'll feel like we're being used and want respond.
A good sitcom needs to have the right ingredients blended together so that the public can related to it, get that right and you may end up with a show that has that something special to make it a hit comedy.
You need a strong story line and then the comedy will evolve from it, conflict problems, and characters bouncing of each other with some good visual comedy thrown in.
The story line or plot and characters must be believable with just slight exaggeration to make it funny.
What do I mean well take Open All Hours with Ronnie Barker and David Jason both played by good actors who became Arkwright and Granville and with Ronnie Barker as Fletcher in Porridge and David Jason in Fools and Horses good actors becoming characters in a sitcom.
The same for a sit com family say Jim Royle and the Royle family again characterisation.
For a more modern day example look at the characters Peter Kay played in Phoenix Nights. The characterising of the people Brian Potter (owner) Max (doorman) and the safety fire Inspector, he becomes them and the show makes you forget he is Peter Kay and you see them as different people. The better you can create a new character is in his own right with his own quirks the easier it is for the viewers to warm to him or her.
Steptoe, Dads Army, Likely Lads, Fawlty Towers, On The Buses, Are You being Served, Hi De Hi, I could go on but they are all about working class folk getting by one day at a time dreaming and hoping for a better future. "This time next year we'll be millionaires"
It is hard to write good comedy but provided you get the formula right, and have a bit of talent it can be done. You must write about something you know or have lived through so it has a ring of truth for it to be successful. What makes me think that well watching and studying comedy for over 30 years. Some people say analysing comedy but the minute you start analysing it then it isn't funny.
Well, there you have it, some of my thoughts on comedy and if you have read this far THANKYOU!
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