West Side Party

A PARTY IS IN FULL SWING AS THE TWO HOSTS (VINNY & GLEN) MEET IN THE KITCHEN

VINCENT:
I Want a word with you... mate! Why on earth did you invite Brian? You knew that Graeme was coming.

GLEN:
What's the problem?

VINCENT:
In case you've forgotten Graeme happens to be a Shark

GLEN:
Yes mate & I'm a sperm whale, honestly you are a tit sometimes.

VINCENT:
Not that kind of Shark, I mean his gang. Grame is a Shark & Brian if I'm not much mistaken is a Jet.

GLEN:
Oh don't worry about that. I know Brian used to be a Jet, but I don't think he bothers with all that these days

VINCENT:
Glen my friend, Once you're a Jet you're a Jet all the way

GLEN:
All the way?

VINCENT:
From your first cigarette right up until your last dying day.

GLEN:
You're wrorrying about nothing mate there'll be no trouble tonight.

VINCENT:
Who Knows? Could be? When Jets & Sharks get together it always seems to result in the most rhythmic, lyrically sublime awful fatal violence.

GLEN:
Now you mention it I did notice that Brian had his ballet shoes on.

VINCENT:
This is worse than I thought.
If they both start dancing near each other I swear I'll hold you responsible, If not now then somewhere, somehow, someday.

GLEN:
I feel pretty...

VINCENT:
Stupid? And so you should. Go and see if everythings ok.

GLEN OPENS THE DOOR TO THE FRONT ROOM AND WE HEAR WEST SIDE STORY MUSIC AS EVERYONE IS CLICKING THEIR FINGERS IN A A CIRCLE AROUND GRAEME & BRIAN WHO ARE DANCING PIROUETTING & CIRCLING ONE ANOTHER.

VINNY:
What's happening mate.

GLEN:
I'm sorry mate, You were right! It's all clicking off.

Lovely idea of it kicking off but with dancing. If I'm honest it seems a little clunkier than your usual (high) standard. Maybe the payoff would be bigger if the characters involved were set up as tough and mean street thug gang members. At the moment they seem just like ordinary guys. Not sure if I make much sense right now, still, enjoyable as it stands but think there's more to be had form the top idea.

I liked it very much. Good work.

Bo.

Does depend on who's seen or knows of West Side Story. Is it that well known nowadays? (I think they did a cutaway with it on Family Guy. Beyond that I know very little of it. Though yes, I'm probably the minority).

She'd love this, Natalie would.

Very nice but I think you could do a pass over the dialogue to make it a bit more natural. I think it would be funnier for it.

That's excelent maybe you preempt the punch a bit?

perhaps if it starts with the fight and works backwards

Cheers all.
Thanks for reading.

I was reminded of an old Smith and Jones sketch. I can't find it on You Tube, but basically Mel and Griff confronted by two dancing gang members knee them in the goolies. Your take on this is different but you should probably be aware.

Love it. I'd lose the line near the end though - 'if they both start dancing near each other' - it detracts from the reveal.

Also be aware there was a Flight of the Conchords episode with a great West Side Story pastiche.

Quote: David Bussell @ October 25 2010, 3:55 PM BST

Very nice but I think you could do a pass over the dialogue to make it a bit more natural. I think it would be funnier for it.

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Cheers David
Yes it doesn't flow so well
Shoehorning in some WSS references made it a bit clunky in places.

Quote: Timbo @ October 25 2010, 6:34 PM BST

I was reminded of an old Smith and Jones sketch. I can't find it on You Tube, but basically Mel and Griff confronted by two dancing gang members knee them in the goolies. Your take on this is different but you should probably be aware.

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Yes I remember that one, I'm sure there must have been others as well.

Quote: Badge @ October 25 2010, 7:16 PM BST

Love it. I'd lose the line near the end though - 'if they both start dancing near each other' - it detracts from the reveal.

Also be aware there was a Flight of the Conchords episode with a great West Side Story pastiche.

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Cheers for the suggestion Badge

I did see the Conchords one as well, it was the highlight of season 2 for me

Keep Cooool Murray lol