Just a quick sketch

Let me know what you think

INT - Old fashioned pub.

An older moustached man sits smoking a pipe looking forlorn. A bartender approaches.

BARTENDER - Mr McAdams, I'm going to have to ask you to put out that pipe.

MCADAMS - You've asked me many things Wichly. Haven't you.

BARTENDER - Don't start Frisbie...

MCADAMS - Who delivered you a t-shirt made of three Lions for your son's Sixth birthday?

BARTENDER - I wish you'd gone to JJB.

MCADAMS - Who taped every episode of Eldorado in case you missed it?

BARTENDER - I never watched an episode.

MCADAMS - Who performed open heart surgery on your poor sick Labrador?

BARTENDER - He wasn't sick Frisbie.

MCADAMS (Tearing up) - Then why did he die Wichly?

BARTENDER (Sympatric) - I don't know...

MCADAMS - (Smiles forcibly) Do you know why they call me Frisbie? Because I always come back

BARTENDER - That's a Boomarang

MCADAMS BREAKS INTO TEARS.

BARTNDER (Pats on back) - I'll get you some more tobacco for your pipe

ENDS

I think you've got balls of steel to use "sympatric" as a wryly.

I quite like this. The characters are intriguing and I'd like to hear more about their relationship and their history. Nice one.

Bo.

Its nice the way you don't know the characters background, gives it an air of intrigue. Reminded me of when Armstrong and Miller were good,and they had their first show in the late 90s with the drunk and his imaginary friend 'Chuffy'. Nice stuff.

I'm not sure what I'm missing here, but this really lost me.

I'm bumping this because I liked your other sketch so much. as Ponderer said this is missing something, let us into the secret..

Before the smoking ban, I used to always see the grizzled old dudes in the corner smoking and looking wistful. Since the ban, they seem to have all disappeared. I never them outside the pub smoking.

Just saw McAdams as one of these types. But mental.

It's interesting but maybe too quick fire

I definitely get the joke, but the speed makes it a little hard to get the characters.

Nice though reminesent of the nAkED gUN

I have to admit that I'm quite confused by this. But, It still made me laugh, nice dialogue and some funny moments. But no idea what's going on, not that I mind that much.