S**te House

BARRACK OBAMA IS TLAKING TO A PLUMBER

BARRACK
Have you found out what that God damn awful stink is? This place no longer smells like the White House, it smells like the shite house.

PLUMBER
You've sprung a leak guvnor.

BARRACK
In the drains?

PLUMBER
Nah it's your wiki mate. You've got wiki leaks all over the place; evidence of torture, assassination, faked casualty reports. You've got almost 10 years of backed up shit and it's going everywhere.

BARRACK
Ho did this happen?

PLUMBER
You've had cowboys in 'aven't ya. Who lived here before you?

BARRACK
The biggest cowboy of them all.

PLUMBER
Well you'll need some to take all this shit for you.

BARRACK
Great David Cameron just flew home.

And there was me thinking that the smell was due to Obabma's addiction to craps!

Nice idea; perhaps could benefit from a slightly stronger ending; maybe find a way of tying it into the BP story somehow?

I really like this one sootyj. Right in the News Revue and Treason zone.

It could do with another eye tidying up a few missed words and such like but you probably knew that.

Also, this exchange:

Quote: sootyj @ July 27 2010, 10:06 AM BST

PLUMBER
You've had cowboys in 'aven't ya. Who lived here before you?

BARRACK
The biggest cowboy of them all.

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has the germ of a great gag but I think you over-expose it. Barrack shouldn't have to explain the gag, the plumber's set-up does that - it should all be in Barrack's reaction/realisation that yes, there was a cowboy in before.

Just my two-pennerth.

Thanks a tidied version is off to NR. With the punch changed to being about BP

I love NR hope I get some stuff in.

Yeah, agree with Badge. Nice work.

Great little sketch that.

I wouldn't have bothered linking it to BP though, better to stay focused I reckon.

Fab!