EDIT:
Thanks to the comments below I've made the following changes to the cartoon:
- Longer establishing shot at start.
- Bit more of a gap before the instructor shouts, 'NOW!'
- Voices are a little louder (not much, but there's a difference).
The link to the newer version is here: http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=XvKpSv10MVE (not that anyone has to look, but by all means, tell me I've got it all wrong)
Cheers for everyone's help so far
Yac
Love the visuals looks really nice. The voices are a little quiet but not to bad. I really like it.
Very good. Well done. 
I think it works great.
Excellent 
This got an instant laugh out loud when I watched this. Nice job 
IMO, there are two good animators on this site - you're one, ShoePie is the other.
Keep up the excellent work; much enjoyed!
Just to add: your establishing shot should be a fraction longer. At the moment it's a bit 'blink and you miss it'.
It's an important part of the set-up, and needs to be seen!
Quote: don rushmore @ July 5 2010, 2:18 PM BSTJust to add: your establishing shot should be a fraction longer. At the moment it's a bit 'blink and you miss it'.
It's an important part of the set-up, and needs to be seen!
I disagree. The pacing seems fine. The shots are setup well.
I looks like Anime Studio am I right mate?
Nice. Agree that the setup needs a fraction longer to bed in though - first time I watched it I missed it and thought for a moment they were sat on a park bench suspended mid air!
Thanks for all the comments so far.
Gavin - I used Flash for this. I've not tried Anime Studio yet. Will have to get round to giving it a go.
2 people (against 1) think the establishing shot is too short. You're probably right. Will lengthen.
Thanks again and any more comments welcome
Yac
Quote: Yacob Wingnut @ July 5 2010, 10:06 PM BSTGavin - I used Flash for this. I've not tried Anime Studio yet. Will have to get round to giving it a go.
2 people (against 1) think the establishing shot is too short. You're probably right. Will lengthen.
Really? That's a thin line thickness. That's suprised me mate looks like Anime Pro. Haha shows what I know I use Flash it's a fine piece of kit.
Plus not quantity fella it's quality 
Na big Dave is probably right on the establishing shot.
Excellent!
Technically -- yes, probably needs a longer establishing shot. Maybe a longer pause before he starts 'Now...'
But they're minor things as it made me laugh
Dan
Gavin - Love Flash, but yeah, it's a bit rubbish at making thin lines. I had to zoom in 400 percent (resolution of animation is 1920-1080) and use the smallest brush on paint to get lines that thin.
Sweryt - I'll experiment with the timing of the 'now'.
Cheers guys
Quote: Yacob Wingnut @ July 6 2010, 10:01 AM BSTGavin - Love Flash, but yeah, it's a bit rubbish at making thin lines. I had to zoom in 400 percent (resolution of animation is 1920-1080) and use the smallest brush on paint to get lines that thin.
Sweryt - I'll experiment with the timing of the 'now'.
Cheers guys
Have thick lines and be proud my friend haha!