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TREVOR RUNS ONTO A VERY CROWDED TRAIN PLATFORM

TIME PASSES TREVOR LOOKS AT HIS WATCH

MORE PEOPLE WALK ONTO THE PLATFORM

VO(TRAIN ANNOUNCER)
The 16.47 express to London is delayed, we apologise for this delay.

TREVOR TO MAN (NEXT TO HIM, TONY)
Oh well at least I didn't miss it.

TONY NODS

MORE PEOPLE WALK ONTO THE PLATFORM

TIME PASSES IT'S NOW GETTING DARK

VO(TRAIN ANNOUNCER)
We would like to appologise for the further delay to this service.

TREVOR
Blimey it's 11PM the tubes will, have stopped I hate night buses

TONY NODS

IT'S NOW NIGHT TIME AND THE PLATFORM IS HEAVING

TONY WALKS TO THE BACK OF THE PLATFORM EVERY ONE EXCEPT SHUFFLES PAST HIM
HE PAYS THEM SOME MONEY EACH

A COACH PULLS UP AND THE PEOPLE WHO WERE ON THE PLATFORM GET ON.
THE FINAL ONE HAS A MEGAPHONE AND WOULD APPEAR TO HAVE BEEN MAKING THE ANNOUNCEMENTS

WE CAN NOW SEE IT WAS AN ABANDONED OUT OF SERVICE STATION.

TREVOR
How am I going to get home? Where am I? Why did you do this?

TONY(AS HE BOARDS THE COACH)
Why do anything?

THE COACH DRIVES OFF
TREVOR SITS IN SILENCE HIS HEAD IN HIS HANDS

I'm not sure what to make of this, Sooty! I think it's a bit too mysterious/nightmarish to be comedy. Mind you, it could be seen as quite Jam. I think it's something you'd have to see to get a clear opinion.

Sooty, I've just had notfunny.com on the phone, they wanna sponsor your sketches.

Quote: Ben @ July 4 2010, 4:06 PM BST

I'm not sure what to make of this, Sooty! I think it's a bit too mysterious/nightmarish to be comedy. Mind you, it could be seen as quite Jam. I think it's something you'd have to see to get a clear opinion.

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It's a sort of a half arsed runner about a guy who does something pointless and a bit irritating for no reason. Either it's not very good or it's a sketch that switches nihilism for humour.

https://www.comedy.co.uk/forums/thread/17617/

This is one of the others (I think it was the best one)

Hey Sooty

Don't really get this one. Kind of understand what you're doing (in the runner) but think it's going to be difficult to pull off without a lot more laughs on the way. If they're related, I reckon you need to at least finish with the same 'What's the point?!' punchline each time.

That said, I liked where this one was going with the delayed train and think it could be a better standalone sketch where people wait until the end of time or beyond determined to catch this train. If you exaggerate it to ridiculousness (start with them missing lunch, then waiting into the next day, then as long as it takes for England to win the world cup, then to nuclear holocaust, then to Judgement Day)

Dan

I think I may go back and edit them so they're all congruent.

Quote: don rushmore @ July 4 2010, 4:16 PM BST

Sooty, I've just had notfunny.com on the phone, they wanna sponsor your sketches.

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They have you on speed dial?