Deleted to do work on it
Stand-up 2
mmmmmmm??? Not sure. I'm confused, are you a man or woman? It shouldn't be important I know but I'm finding it hard to visualise who's actually saying these lines. When it comes to stand up it matters who's saying what. It's part of the act. It's not really my humour but that's not to say that there isn't an audience for it. I just wouldn't be in it that's all. It seems to rely on a lot of one liners too and I'm not sure if they're funny enough. The first part where you were waiting for your friend (your previous post) was more of a story, this one seems disjointed. Nothing that can't be fixed,
ta ta.
Karlos.
haha yes it was written for a male to perform, not for myself. I'll work on it
thanks