Bird Watchers

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Very good Giggle-o, I really pictured this in my mind as I was reading it.

I gotta agree, nice concept and good gags throughout.

Thanks WC and Slag. I'm glad you could picture it, always a concern.

(I see you might have something exciting in the pipeline SlagA, all the best, I hope it runs smoothly to our screens, whether big or small)

I love the image of the female bird consulting a 'ground walker' book.

Quote: M Paterson @ April 18 2010, 9:08 PM BST

I love the image of the female bird consulting a 'ground walker' book.

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Ah, it was actually land-walkers but ground-walkers might be better.

Cheers

Enjoyed this. Great concept.

Quote: The Giggle-o @ April 18 2010, 3:30 PM BST

TIM

Well, they've got such small brains it'll probably only be about food...or mating. (THEY LOOK AT EACH OTHER CHEEKILY; MEREDITH TITTERS)

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At this point I expected the birds were going to be watching a mating display of their own. You might want to capitalise on that as the entrance of the 'chavs' was the weakest part of the sketch I thought.

Sorry, land walkers you're right. Attention span of a Big Brother contestant.

Quote: David Bussell @ April 19 2010, 4:21 PM BST

Enjoyed this. Great concept.

At this point I expected the birds were going to be watching a mating display of their own. You might want to capitalise on that as the entrance of the 'chavs' was the weakest part of the sketch I thought.

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Thanks DB, it's the first draft so hopefully I'll be able to improve on it. I included the 'Chavs' bit as a way of squeezing in the line about migrating to Spain in the summer really. Might try and find another way of getting it in.

Cheers

Very nice, Giggle-o, but one thing: "longer head grass"..? Surely "featherier heads" or something to do with feathers, no?

Quote: Bryan Parry @ April 19 2010, 7:44 PM BST

Very nice, Giggle-o, but one thing: "longer head grass"..? Surely "featherier heads" or something to do with feathers, no?

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Hhmaybe, I dunno, the natural properties of hair say grass rather than feathers to me, but you're probably right!

Thanks for that Bryan. I look forward to slagging off critiquing your output.

Love it.
Nice one.

Great descriptions. Great jokes. Flows perfectly.

Nothing I don't like.

"Migrate to Spain in Summer"

Thanks guys!

I'd like to produce a land/ground-walkers book but I don't think I've got the illustration skills.

Very nice, but a couple of minor suggestions

I would lose the 'small brains' reference, it does not make much sense and is not necessary to make the line work.

'Head grass' perhaps go with a more technical feather reference, as birdwatchers would when making an identification, e.g. "the female seems to have longer head coverts'' and perhaps add "and to puff out her chest more".