Quote: James Cotter @ March 3 2010, 3:56 PM GMTI am trying to showcase my acting, mainly comic roles to people in the industry.
I am trying achieve more roles in more shows preferable on the television or radio.
This showreel will help a producer decide if I'm right for something he or she has in mind because before when producers asked I had to show them whole short films or sitcoms this is a quick and essay way of deciding whether I am right for them.
Marc P beat me to it - this is not remotely of a high enough standard, either the acting or the film/video. It's not broadcast quality I'm afraid, so you'd be wasting your time and money, and possibly ruining future better chances, by sending out examples of your work when, by your own admission, the material is not you at your best (writing or acting). It's not an example of what you are offering people, therefore it does not work as a showreel. As you are still at college, why not wait? You always seem to be working on something new. Wait til you've got something which you know nails what what you have to offer.
This is not to say you will never achieve that, but, as even you recognise, you're nowhere near achieveing that yet. Why run before you can walk? Why burn a bridge now with someone who will see the name James Cotter on a DVD on his desk (or whatever) and will say, "not him again".
This business is hard enough. Don't become a nuisance before you become interesting.
It will not help you in the professional industry.
It will not help you get roles in TV or radio.
It will not convince a producer to cast you as something, because it doesn't show you doing anything for which you might be cast.
You asked for critique, so there it is. Now go and grow into yourself and come back as the best thing since sliced bread.
I'm a mere no-one, but my advice is free.