British Comedy Guide

Charity Sketch

Haven't posted for quite some time. So thought I would. This is just a quick sketch I'm not sure works or not. Any critique will be appreciated! Cheers guys!

A MAN IS SITTING ON A CHAIR. HE LOOKS TIRED AND SCARED. A CONFUSED FEMALE WANDERS IN.

Jess: Hello?

Carl: Have you come to rescue us? Please say you have!

Jess: What is this place?

Carl: We have been forced to live here by the BBC! Whenever a celebrity has an idea for a fund raising scheme, we are forced to watch it first. If we think it's good enough, the world see's it. If not, it's never mentioned or heard of again!

Jess: God. That's terrible.

Carl: Do you know what I've seen?

Jess: Well.....

Carl: I've seen Horne and Corden sketches!

Jess: We've all seen them.

Carl: I've seen a naked Vanessa Feltz covered in nothing but Marmite! She looked me directly in the eyes!

Jess: I.....

Carl: (CRYING) I've seen Sue Pollard's vagina!

A MAN COMES RUNNING IN. HE IS VISIBLY SCARED.

Kev: God no. I've just spotted Barrymore.

Carl: On his way here?

Kev: Yes!

Jess: What have they got him doing?

Kev: I don't know - but he's got Speedo's on.

THEY ALL SCREAM AND RUN.

F**k me, Paul! I was only thinking about you this morning! I hope you are well!

I shall look at your sketch later and leave feedback.

Sorry, Paul, but it didn't work for me.

The setup of the sketch isn't that funny and feels a little awkward to me. There's a lot of exposition as well - The Jess character seems to serve little purpose apart from enquiring what's happening. And how did she end up there?

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