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Nearly caved in today and I had good reason but didn't. Do weekends count?

Quote: Marc P @ February 25 2010, 10:29 PM GMT

Nearly caved in today and I had good reason but didn't. Do weekends count?

No they don't. Even better, weekends now officially start on Thursdays.

Shit :(

You're making me feel like a pusher.

I'll be strong! :(

I'll leave my Whiskey Sketch for another day.
:D Whistling nnocently

That's a lovely neat bit of comedy, strong characters and a pleasant if expected punchline.

Shades of Little Britain in a good way.

Quote: sootyj @ February 25 2010, 10:52 PM GMT

Shades of Little Britain in a good way.

Did someone say Molly Sugden?

Quote: sootyj @ February 25 2010, 10:52 PM GMT

Shades of Little Britain

And here's David wearing them

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...and back to critique.

Nitpicking, I would say it's perhaps a little too long - it reads okay but if acted out I don't think it would come across well/natural.

I thought the final line was a little forced and not as funny as it could have been? Perhaps just a simple "Some people. Just don't know when to listen".

Other than that I thought it was pretty funny especially with having no jokes.

I think this sketch is an idea worth developing.

Cheers all
:)

Quote: Craig H @ February 26 2010, 11:45 AM GMT

...and back to critique.

I thought the final line was a little forced and not as funny as it could have been? Perhaps just a simple "Some people. Just don't know when to listen".

Other than that I thought it was pretty funny especially with having no jokes.

Cheers.
I did change the last line just before posting and it isn't great, yours is good though.

Quote: Marc P 74 @ February 26 2010, 7:35 PM GMT

I think this sketch is an idea worth developing.

Cheers Marc
It's not quite there, but It might be worth a rewrite, or rethink, I won't bin it just yet in any case.
:)

You executed the idea quite well but it didn't really seem structured as a sketch, so are you just experimenting with the character to maybe do something with it? i.e. put the character in a longer piece.

As it is it isn't particularly funny more an exercise in representing a certain character type. Maybe a few character twists and turns along the way, breaking from the subject matter of writing and talking inappropriately about her personal life might make it fit more as a sketch? Otherwise it is all a bit 'one-note'.

:)

Yeah it's completely one note, and deliberately so.
In my head it was funny, but it doesn't have great depth or twists & turns.

Quote: Steve Sunshine @ February 26 2010, 8:00 PM GMT

Yeah it's completely one note, and deliberately so.
In my head it was funny, but it doesn't have great depth or twists & turns.

Yes, sorry, I thought you had done it intentionally. (Press invisible IGNORE button next to Giggle-o's comments).

:)

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