NJ: ipad sketch

GRAMS:INT. 'SEXY MUSIC' E.G SERGE GAINSBORG, 'JE T'AIME'. PLAYS SOFTLY BEHIND DIALOGUE UNTIL 'CUT'.

FX:INT. MURMURS IN BACKGROUND. NOISES OF GLASSES 'CLINKING' THROUGHOUT

MAN #1h my god, you are so beautiful

FEMALE VOICESPEAKS SEDUCTIVELY AT ALL TIMES)
You want me don't you? You want to touch me?

MAN #1:Jesus yes.

FEMALE VOICE:Why don't you do it - touch me?

MAN # 1:Really? You want me to…

FEMALE VOICE:Touch me? Do it.

FX:MAN IN BACKGROUND SHOUTS 'DO IT'

MAN # 1:Touch you?

FEMALE VOICEo it baby. Just reach over and touch me

FX:MAN IN BACKGROUND SHOUTS 'DO IT!!'.

MAN # 1:I'm gonna do it. I'm reaching over. I'm gonna touch you.

GRAMS:CUT 'SEXY MUSIC' AS;

FX:NEEDLE SCRATCHES ACROSS RECORD. ALARM SOUNDS

BOUNCERkay sir, no touching the iPad.

END

J

Yeah, this one is quite good. I can imagine a lot of it would come out in performance as it felt a longer read, but the cast hamming it up would be funny.

Dan

Excellent.

Quote: swerytd @ February 4 2010, 1:26 PM GMT

Yeah, this one is quite good. I can imagine a lot of it would come out in performance as it felt a longer read, but the cast hamming it up would be funny.

Dan

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Thanks guys. I only started writing sketches a couple of weeks ago so I am working hard at structuring them and, well, everything really. So thanks for the positive 'vibes'.

J

Nice one, probably could be tighter but it does the job.