Video Blog 2

There is some good attempts at jokes here, some oldies too. But reading this, it all sounds so forced. That could be something that's not obvious when it comes to actually performing it though.

The first paragraph and second line do not add much, unless it's a joke from 'Video Blog 1' I missed?

The punchline to this is quite good...

I got into comedy at a very early age when my mother-to-be opened the front door and found me on the door step. All wrapped up in a little blanket I was. And to be totally accurate she found me just off the doorstep cos the door opened outwards, you see.

For the first six months of my life I was brought up as a milk bottle.

But the setup is a bit long winded. I kinda appreciate the little joke about the outwards door, but it's not hilarious.

A lot of lines you could remove. For example,

"A lot of people ask how I got in comedy. A lot of people ask me when I'm getting out of comedy, actually, but that's another story."

It's an oldie. But I don't know who your audience is, and as a quick joke, if performed well, it works fine as a collection of jokes in a monologue.

"Do you remember when you were little how your mother used to spit on a hankie and wipe dirt off your face? My mum never bothered with the hankie. She just used to spit straight into my face."

You don't really need the last line OR you could take it further...

My mum never bothered with the hankie. In fact, she just sneezed directly into my face.

That's when I started to write perform comedy. As a defence mechanism. I had a knife as well but that got confiscated. So it was comedy or nothing.

Change that to perform it's visually more appealing, obviously.

Or alternative:

I used comedy as a defence mechanism at school. I had a knife as well, but that was rubber. I had a gun, but that shot water. I had a bat, but that flew away.

Or something like that.

Overall, I liked your effort. I can see your humour and with some fine tweaking, I can imagine it being quite funny, in a silly kind of way.

Thanks so much, Leevil.

I've taken your advice on board and my next BOG will be funnier and better, I hope.