Richard, I see from your profile that you like "off the wall" stuff and have been writing on and off for twenty years. I am a big fan of skewed comedy myself but I struggled to find any purchase in your script. As Morrace says the spelling etc is pretty bad, even by my own standards so I would definitely sort that out. Being oblique is fine, but this, just seems random.
What the f**k's a pasry?
That's not 'off the wall', it's just nonsense that no one can understand.
Quote: zooo @ November 19 2009, 7:41 PM GMTWhat the f**k's a pasry?
That's not 'off the wall', it's just nonsense that no one can understand.
Quote: zooo @ November 19 2009, 7:41 PM GMTNonsense that no one can understand.
That's exactly how Pinter's best plays were first reviewed. 
Quote: Roodeye @ November 19 2009, 8:08 PM GMTThat's exactly how Pinter's best plays were first reviewed.
And your point is?
Quote: Timbo @ November 19 2009, 8:09 PM GMTAnd your point is?
We've had a spate of strange scripts recently and while I respect Zoo's opinion - indeed, I wouldn't seek to disagree with it - we must allow that 'total bollocks' can sometimes be the product of a brilliant mind.
Let me stress that I'm not suggesting our recent crop of 'bollocks-writers' are necessarily more talented than they appear or that their works are worthier than they appear.
I'm merely suggesting we should allow the possibility.
I just meant that the original reviews of Pinter were not that far off the mark.
Quote: Timbo @ November 19 2009, 9:00 PM GMTI just meant that the original reviews of Pinter were not that far off the mark.
I'm with Timbo on this. I can't stand Pinter.
You prefer your TwoFinger don't you, Griff?
Quote: Leevil @ November 19 2009, 9:16 PM GMTYou prefer your TwoFinger don't you, Griff?
A few stiff whiskies is exactly what you need before sitting through one of Harold's masterpieces.
I had put a totally different connotation on that...
I'm just pleased you got it.
Quote: Timbo @ November 19 2009, 9:33 PM GMTI had put a totally different connotation on that...
And I don't suppose it was a KitKat.
More like a finger of fudge...