Car Parking

Sorting through some old pen drives and found this...
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roof of office block. jumper stands on the edge. Man approaches slowly.

MAN:Excuse me.

JUMPERtay back. I'll jump.

MAN:That's what I wanted to talk to you about.

man gets closer.

JUMPER:You'll not stop me. You can't talk me out of it.

man stands next to jumper.

MAN:I realise that, it's just that...

JUMPER:What? I've got so much to live for? Things can't be that bad? Well I haven't, and they are.

MAN:Well... you see... could you move about five feet to your left.

JUMPER:Why, so that you can grab me and pull me back?

MAN:No... (POINTING DOWN) That's my car, it's taken me twenty minutes to find that space and I don't want to have to move it again.

Yeeeesss!!

I think the laughs will come immediately after "MAN: No... (POINTING DOWN) That's my car" and the rest of the line will be lost.

That's no bad thing in my view as "MAN: No... (POINTING DOWN) That's my car" is all the punchline you need.

Lovely jubbly but get the title changed, damn you

Very good, made me laugh, but I'd reiterate what Roodeye said about the punchline.

Good stuff all the same!

Cheers folks... It could stand to lose the last bit. I always tend to think radio and chuck in unnecessary exposition.

haha funny Smyling.

Funny.

Very good.

Thank you folks

Another good jumper sketch.