Roodeye
Tuesday 20th October 2009 7:54pm [Edited]
255 posts
Your material is basically quite funny but you need to word each joke so that reasonably intelligent and literate people will get it.
There are only 26 letters in the alphabet but, arranged in the right order, you've got ALL Shakespeare's plays. In your act, the words, their order and the stresses upon them are everything.
Instead of "I'm a bit of a stallion. That means I'm in a stable relationship", you should try:
(PROUDLY) "I'm a bit of a stallion, actually (THEN, AS IF SEEKING TO REASSURE THE AUDIENCE) but I'm in a stable relationship!" (STRESS ON 'RELATIONSHIP') (WAIT FOR LAUGH) (IF LAUGHTER IS SPARSE, CONTINUE) "Stallion? Stable?" (LOOK AT AUDIENCE AS IF TO SAY 'SURELY YOU GET IT NOW') (SOMEBODY WILL LAUGH, LOOK AT THEM AND SAY "Thank God for you, love (or mate)" (POINT AT A GROUP WHO DIDNT LAUGH) "Explain it to this lot will you?"