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I liked the suspense but I have a suggestion for a different, sinister ending which doesn't involve clowns!

AFTER STARTING THE CAR, MIKE GETS BACK OUT AND SHUTS THE DOOR.

CUT TO: INT. CAR

MIKES WIFE IS "ASLEEP" IN THE PASSENGER SEAT

CUT TO: EXT. COUNTRY LANE

MIKE WALKS AWAY FROM CAR WHISTLING WHILST JUBILANTLY TOSSING/CATCHING ROHYPNOL BOTTLE.

Simon B - Fair enough :)

Eleven out of ten! Laughing out loud

Quote: Geoff Mutton @ August 13 2009, 1:50 PM BST

I liked the suspense but I have a suggestion for a different, sinister ending which doesn't involve clowns!

AFTER STARTING THE CAR, MIKE GETS BACK OUT AND SHUTS THE DOOR.

CUT TO: INT. CAR

MIKES WIFE IS "ASLEEP" IN THE PASSENGER SEAT

CUT TO: EXT. COUNTRY LANE

MIKE WALKS AWAY FROM CAR WHISTLING WHILST JUBILANTLY TOSSING/CATCHING ROHYPNOL BOTTLE.

Very good.

This is the sort of thing that would definitely make me laugh if I saw it.

Sorry to bump this - take a look at this sketch I just saw on FOD starring the brilliant Kevin Eldon. It's almost exactly how I imagined mine, with the dramatic music and what have you. Only their punchline is better I think. Kevin Eldon is just wonderful. http://www.funnyordie.co.uk/videos/371a6cbeca/sweet-oblivion

Don't agree - I think both yours and Geoff Mutton's are better. Good production values and acting though.

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