Jack Tweed’s grief leads him to party party.

http://www.bitethenews.com/2009/08/08/jack-tweeds-grief-for-jade-leads-him-to-party-all-night-long/

Comments please, is it too cruel ???

Hi Norman,

Like my reply, it may be too late, rather than too cruel.

For me there were some inconsistencies that made it hard to believe eg 'I need help','I may need to get help' and 'so soon','not long'.

You obviously had fun wriitng it and that's all that matters.

Thanks for pointing out the 'I need help' and the 'I may need to get help' . I have edited that to make it sound more consistent.

The 'so soon' and 'not long' are consistent though are they not ?.