INT. BAR - DAY
A MAN WALKS IN.
MAN
Ouch!
End.
EVEN QUICKIERER SKETCH #3
Errrrrrrrrrrrrrrrrr... the formatting was good
What if he were foriegn and 'ouch' actually meant 'trousers'?
But he's not foreign is he? He's actually got a rich history of glorious detail, I spent days writing. So much depth, so much emotion.
(wipes away tear)
You mean it's an old joke?
*Claps*
My turn
INT. BAR - DAY
A MAN ENTERS.
BARMAN
Ouch!
End.
Is the concept that the man enters the barman? If so, then it's superior, but longer than the first one.
Good stuff!
*Bagsie* next turn.
INT. BAR - DAY
A DOG ENTERS.
BARMAN
We don't serve dogs.
End.
INT. BAR - DAY
A sandwich enters.
BARMAN:
Sorry, don't serve food here.
End.
Rosco wins that round!
Ha ha. Yep.
INT. MAN - DAY
A bar enters.
MAN:
Ouch.
FADE OUT.
INT. PUB. DAY.
MAN FROM PREVIOUS SKETCH ENTERS.
LANDLORD
Get out. You've been barred.
END
INT.PUB.DAY
A SHOE ENTERS
BARMAN
(Gestures with his hands) Shooooooo!
EXT: BAR - NIGHT
A MAN STAGGERS OUT.
Man
Ouch!
END