British Comedy Guide

The Good Times.

A MAN AND A WOMAN ARE STANDING ON A TRAIN PLATFORM IN THE RAIN.

PAUL: So! There's nothing I can say that would make you change your mind, that's it is it?

SARAH: We've been through this already, let's not make things any harder than they are.

PAUL: But what about all the good times we've had, surely that means something to you?

CUT TO A MONTAGE WITH 'WHAT A WONDERFUL WORLD' BY LOUIS ARMSTRONG PLAYING IN THE BACKGROUND.

FIRST WE SEE PAUL ON ONE KNEE IN A RESTAURANT OFFERING A RING, WITH SARAH IN TEARS OF JOY.

NEXT WE SEE PAUL COVERING SARAH EYES. WHEN HE REMOVES THEM WE REVEAL A LOVELY HOUSE. SARAHS FACE IS A PICTURE OF JOY. PAUL SHOWS THE KEYS, HANDS THEM TO HER & SHE THROWS HER ARMS AROUND HIM.

WE THEN SEE PAUL RUMMAGING UNDER THE CHRISTMAS TREE, HE GRABS A PARCEL. OPENS IT AND PULLS OUT A PUPPY. SARAH CLAPS HER HANDS, LAUGHS, TAKES THE PUPPY FROM PAUL AND GIVES IT A SQUEEZE.

FINALLY WE SEE PAUL TICKLING SARAH ON THE SOFA, THEY ARE BOTH LAUGHING UPROARIOUSLY. THEY STOP TO CATCH THEIR BREATH, LOOK AT ONE ANOTHER LOVINGLY & SHARE A TENDER KISS.'

SARAH: It's just that when you actually add them up, all the good times only last about Thirty seconds.

PAUL: Thirty Two & a half actually.

SARAH: To be honest, the rest of the time you've been a complete C**t

THE LAST WORD IS OBSCURED BY THE SOUND OF A TRAIN WHISTLE.

SARAH: I think that's my train.(Points to her baggage) Could you help me with my...

PAUL: No.

END

Nice one clever and compact, maybe if she could also reference the music?

Ha! That's a good one Fred.

Very good.

:)

Liked it.

Brilliant.

Sexy.

Nice one Fred. I thought the puppy was going to be relevant.

Who got to keep the dog BTW?

Thanks for reading everyone.
:)

Quote: Geoff Mutton @ July 26 2009, 6:03 AM BST

Nice one Fred. I thought the puppy was going to be relevant.

Who got to keep the dog BTW?

Sarah kept the dog, I think it was in one of her suitcases.
:D

Yep v good and agree with Griff. :D

Quote: Griff @ July 26 2009, 8:29 PM BST

This is really good. Laughing out loud

I'd end it straight after the montage:

SARAH: It's just that when you add them up, all the good times only last about thirty seconds. The rest of the time you were a complete twat.

-- END --

It's a good suggestion & I'd happily stop it there if it works better.
But I do like the line where Paul corrects her, as it shows that he knows full well precisely how long the Good times have lasted.

I liked it lots. In a brutal cut, I'd agree with Griff, but otherwise it's fine.

Dan

Another agreement with Griff. But it did make me smile as it is!

I like this one a lot. Clever "wish I'd thought of that" idea, and well done.

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