James Cotter
Saturday 20th June 2009 11:40pm
Exeter, Devon
1,594 posts
Quote: sootyj @ June 20 2009, 8:16 PM BST
I'm not a great fan of this.
If you need to spend 20% of the first episode giving a voice over intro then you may not be making things clear enough.
None of the main characters interact at all. It's 2 characters who are pretty one dimensional in a vacum.
20% of the episode is not spent giving a voice over intro it's less then that and yes we do need to spend some time in dispensing who these characters are because this is a pilot episode for a purposed series of six.
The two characters are not meant to interact, that was a deliberate decision taken by us the writers. We decided to do this because I have never seen this done in a sitcom and because there is a tenuous storyline thought out the first series. If you do not like that then your be pleased to know in the second series they interact a lot more.
Both Keith and Mark are far from one dimensional. We don't just spend the whole episode dealing out pointless one-liners that are detached from the characters own personalities. There are emotional points in the show and elements of drama which we will explore in greater detail in the series which make there fully fledged individuals.
Quote: Fred Sunshine @ June 20 2009, 8:23 PM BST
I did give part 1 a try.
To be honest I couldn't tell whether it had any potential or not.
The Voiceover wasn't very good & the sound was hard to pick up in general.
You & your writing partner are young with plenty of confidence so I'd say keep up the work and hopefully this will be something that will make you cringe when you look back at it and compare it to your future work.
Thanks for the good luck. I am aware that the voiceover needs some work but when we make this professionally we will hirer a professional voice over artist. Also I can never judge anything intill I've seen the full show. Go on give part two ago.
Quote: don rushmore @ June 20 2009, 8:30 PM BST
How many people have actually seen it?
I'm 32.
Laziness as in, if you had done some research you'd know most production companies would not want to go anywhere near this type of thing. It has been done to death.
Have got a exact figure I would say someone just under 500. More soon as we our having it screened at the Picture House in Exeter. Another 250 then not including the rising internet views.
32 are you. You look a lot older.
I have already discussed the format of the show. I can clearly see everyone on here hates mockumentary but as I explained earlier it's the easiest thing to shoot in a short amount of time and it's only a demo pilot which we will properly make it to a sitcom any way when we have the budget.