Walkies

SOMETHING A LITTLE DIFFERENT FROM ME HERE GUYS. SILLY AND SURREAL. FEEDBACK APPRECIATED AS ALWAYS.

I KNOW IT'S A LITTLE LONG BUT I HAD FUN WRITING IT.
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A MAN IS STANDING WITH A DOG WHILE TALKING TO A WOMAN AT A DOOR.

WOMAN:
That's not my dog.

MAN:
That's right, yours lost.

WOMAN:
You lost her!?

MAN:
Don't blame me cause your dogs slow.

WOMAN:
Slow! what are you talking about?

MAN:
She got beat fair and square.

WOMAN:
You raced my dog!?

MAN:
No, no, she raced all by herself.

WOMAN:
I paid you to take her for a walk.

MAN:
Yea, and that's about all she did.

WOMAN:
Are you saying my dogs slow?

MAN:
She wasn't just slow, she couldn't handle the jumps!

WOMAN:
The jumps!?

MAN:
Yea, she hit pretty much them all.

WOMAN:
Where is she now? Is she okay?

MAN:
Don't worry, she shouldn't be long, she wanted to throw the javelin first.

WOMAN:
The javelin!!!???

MAN:
Yes, it's all quite safe.

WOMAN:
You haven't seen her throw a javelin!

END.

Nice punch line.
Takes a bit long to get there, doesn't need the confusion at the top IMHO - you just need to establish the 'dog entered into athletics competition' scenario then into the twist at the end.
Funny, though.

Quote: Lazzard @ June 5 2009, 10:33 AM BST

Nice punch line.
Takes a bit long to get there, doesn't need the confusion at the top IMHO - you just need to establish the 'dog entered into athletics competition' scenario then into the twist at the end.
Funny, though.

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Thanks Lazzard. Good comments.

I KNEW beforehand it's a bit long and drawn but like I said I just enjoyed writing it and don't think it ruins it too much?

Thanks for the feedback again Lazzard.