Does this scene work ? Can you visualise ? Is it too much ?
All feedback much appreciated. As I've cut and pasted I realise the setting out is incorrect.
SCENE 1.INT DEANS FLAT 5.30
SMALL ONE BED APARTMENT, DATED BUT WELL ORGANISED AND CLEAN. BROWN FOR THE MOST PART WITH SOME 70S FIXTURES. IN THE CORNER OF THE ROOM SITS A LARGE AQUARIUM FILLED WITH LIVE BUTTERFLYS.
SHOT OF DEAN CONCENTRATING FULLY ON WHATS IN HIS HANDS, FACE CONTORTING IN A MIXTURE OF ECSTACY AND UNCOMFORT.
DEAN:
Come on, come on that's it hmmmmm
SHOWS EXCITEMENT ON FACE. TWISTING IN PLEASURE
DEAN:
Yes, yes you filthy little whores.
DEANS TOES START TO CURL, TOENAILS ARE CLEAN AND WELL KEPT.
DEAN:
Oooh oooh oooh yeah yeahthat's it.(calms) Hmmm
RAISES GLASS OF BUTTERFLYS INTO VIEW. THE BUTTERFLYS AT THE BOTTOM ARE GLUED TOGETHER WITH SEMEN.
DEAN MOVES TO THE AQUARIUM AND LETS THE BUTTERFLYS THAT AREN'T GLUED TOGETHER BACK IN.
HE THEN WALKS TO THE BATHROOM AND FLUSHES THE REMAINDER DOWN THE TOILET AND RINSES OUT THE JAR.
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. Spellchecker at it's best 
