Any tips on avoiding the constant use of he did this, he did that... when writing a story/novel?
I'm sure I did learn this at school, but buggered if I can remember.
Thank you!
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Quote: Leevil @ April 8 2009, 7:39 PM BSTAny tips on avoiding the constant use of he did this, he did that... when writing a story/novel?
I'm sure I did learn this at school, but buggered if I can remember.
Thank you!
Yeah, read some novels and you'll see what other writers do!
As long as you're not using it TOO much, it's one of those words that disappears. We don't really notice it as we read.
It only stands out to you because you're writing it.
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Quote: Leevil @ April 8 2009, 7:39 PM BSTAny tips on avoiding the constant use of he did this, he did that... when writing a story/novel?
I'm sure I did learn this at school, but buggered if I can remember.
Thank you!
Longer sentences and put his name in occasionally. Change to first person randomly so you can use 'I' and 'me' just to break it up a bit.
'If you're writing a conversation between two people,' said Chuck, cracking open his fourth Special Brew of the morning, 'you can just...' He stopped, launching into a coughing fit.
'But Chuck,' said Leevil, hopping off the table and swinging his arms low, 'you don't know shit, remember? You're just a harmless old boozer.'
'I've still got fight in me!' Chuck shouted, spit and beer flying from his mouth. 'Don't write me off!'
'I'm sorry, I'm writing you off. And besides, no man named "Chuck" deserves to be taken seriously.'
'You can talk. What the hell does "Leevil" mean?'
'It means--'
'I'm not interested! In fact, just turn around and go. Get back to your cage, at London zoo or wherever. Don't they do headcounts in the chimpanzee enclosure?'
'I'm on day release. I don't have to be back till 9pm.'
'Well go and bother someone else!' shouted Chuck, tossing the half-full can after him.
Leevil dodged the can and swung an arm wildly, lacerating Chuck's throat and leaving him bleeding profusely from a main artery
'You... you crazy old man!' sobbed the monkey, tears welling in his eyes. 'Everyone knows how dangerous chimps can be!'
'It's... it's those old adverts. Ty Phoo tea... False sense of...' Chuck tried geetting up but his arms failed him. He lay back for the last time and let out his dying breath.
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