Quote: Tom G @ March 31 2009, 10:30 PM BSTA mighty boosh fan won't be the same as an Only fools and horses fan.
Does that make me a schizophrenic? 
Random
If you feel your writing is too dialogue heavy and doesn't have enough action and/or plot, a good exercise might be to try re-writing this or write something else with no or little dialogue.
Quote: Marc P @ March 31 2009, 8:53 PM BSTOr you have missed the plot.
Or this is a mock documentary, like the office, which unless I have missed the plot yours isn't.
Not being mean, but take on board what some reviewers say and if you think they know what they are talking about, which admittedly is a tough call, either agree with them or not, and I sympathise with the not, but there is little point debating or arguing your style of comedy. Sometimes you have to just put it out there. On a personal note, if it isn't story driven just observation based comedy - it's got to me more closely observed than most. That's a tough one to set yourself up against. Extremely tough. A knob gag is easy, a line that really delineates the human condition - not so.
And the format - 30 mins is sitcom. Three BIG laughs per minute and chuckles in between.
You have a way with words Mr. P, but then so you should
It was your advice back in November last year that actually turned my idea around, then coupled with advice from Lee Henman which helped make it what it is, still unsure if its anything worth bothering with in the grand scale of things.
Quote: Eden Carter @ March 31 2009, 10:03 PM BSTI always thought that its we as the reader or viewer who decides if it's funny or not, because we can all amuse ourselves with our writing, it's amusing other's that's the challenge, surely?
Imo, the writer writes what he / she thinks is funny. If they find it funny, then it is funny... to them. Whether one or millions happen to agree is another consideration. That comes down to many other factors that a writer is not often in control of.
Quote: Dolly Dagger @ March 31 2009, 8:59 PM BSTWill these ones do?
lol, trust double D to raise a wee smile when needed
Quote: random @ March 31 2009, 10:44 PM BSTlol, trust double D to raise a wee smile when needed
Is that like Ulrika's incontinence?
I'll shut up now and let everyone be serious....
Quote: SlagA @ March 31 2009, 10:42 PM BSTImo, the writer writes what he / she thinks is funny. If they find it funny, then it is funny... to them. Whether one or millions happen to agree is another consideration. That comes down to many other factors that a writer is not often in control of.
I'm still learning and what you state is something I've learned from this forum over the last few months
Quote: Dolly Dagger @ March 31 2009, 10:47 PM BSTIs that like Ulrika's incontinence?
I'll shut up now and let everyone be serious....
As you please
I was clarifying Eden's question, Random, not commenting on your work
Quote: SlagA @ March 31 2009, 10:50 PM BSTI was clarifying Eden's question, Random, not commenting on your work
No worries but please do
Can you email it to me?
Quote: bigfella @ March 31 2009, 10:11 PM BSTI'd disagree with you there Eden. The only thing that you can write is what you find funny. Whatever you write, someone isn't going to like it. So if you try to second guess what other people find funny, you're in trouble to start with - if you don't find it funny......oh Christ I'm confused now, I wish I had never started this.
Again, agree
I can but it is there to download in critique 'Door To Door'
Quote: SlagA @ March 31 2009, 10:42 PM BSTImo, the writer writes what he / she thinks is funny. If they find it funny, then it is funny... to them. Whether one or millions happen to agree is another consideration. That comes down to many other factors that a writer is not often in control of.
Yeah I agree but I can't help thinking this idea of writing is slightly naive. If we didn't also think about whether others would think something was funny or not then why bother trying to make a career out of it.? As struggling, non-established writers, aren't we constantly trying to please others through our writing? We want people reading our scripts or sketches to like our work and to take it further, so do we not try to tailor our writing to hit the right buttons?
Quote: Eden Carter @ March 31 2009, 10:56 PM BSTYeah I agree but I can't help thinking this idea of writing is slightly naive. If we didn't also think about whether others would think something was funny or not then why bother trying to make a career out of it.? As struggling, non-established writers, aren't we constantly trying to please others through our writing? We want people reading our scripts or sketches to like our work and to take it further, so do we not try to tailor our writing to hit the right buttons?
But surely they should like our work for what it is naturally not because we have intentionally shaped it for them!
Quote: Eden Carter @ March 31 2009, 10:56 PM BSTAs struggling, non-established writers, aren't we constantly trying to please others through our writing?
Leave me and SlagA out of this!
Quote: Marc P @ March 31 2009, 10:58 PM BSTLeave me and SlagA out of this!
Quote: random @ March 31 2009, 10:58 PM BSTBut surely they should like our work for what it is naturally not because we have intentionally shaped it for them!
Well when you say it like that it sounds bad but I mean as non-established writers we aren't given the same freedom as say some established writers are allowed, so we may have to dull down our outlandish ideas.
