A new short sketch - your feedback appreciated.
Thanks
EXT - CITY STREET - NIGHT
A MAN walking with his DOG.
MAN
Not here boy. Too busy.
LATER
EXT - QUIETER STREET - NIGHT
MAN still walking DOG. MAN looks round and stops.
MAN
Maybe here old chap.
A YOUNG COUPLE emerge from a side street.
MAN
Maybe not.
LATER
EXT - THE PARK - NIGHT
MAN and DOG come to a halt. MAN looks round furtively. DOG does the same in imitation.
MAN
Okay. Do your business, scamp!
DOG runs off screen. MAN drops his trousers and pants, squats, and grimaces as he dumps his load. DOG runs back on screen wrapped in toilet roll, Andrex-style. MAN grabs the paper and wipes his arse.
MAN
I never know how you do that, but I'm always grateful.
MAN pulls up his trousers. DOG covers up his master's turds by kicking his back legs through the soil.
LATER
EXT - RESIDENTIAL STREET - NIGHT
MAN
Nearly home, scamp!
DOG stops by a lamppost and is about to cock his leg.
MAN (angrily)
Oi! No lampposts!
Chastised DOG scuttles along and pisses himself.
END
That's a really good twist there, love the Andrex puppy idea. Echo the above re: the last scene - also your current ending "the dog pisses itself" is more a joke on paper than in the sketch itself.