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Quote: Godot Taxis @ March 17 2009, 12:18 PM GMT

This is excellent Lee - really funny and brightly written. I laughed throughout. Clever, clever stuff. Didn't really like the ending with the clown though. Also, maybe it's funnier if there is an animal roar from outside after 'many redundancy' and the Great Borovski doesn't allude to his bear. Nice one.

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Thanks for the feedback. I did actually think about the Manager just giving the strongman a quizzical look when the bear roars instead of saying "What was that?", but in the end I put myself in the Manager's shoes and I'm pretty sure I'd say "What was that?" if I heard a bear roar.

Quote: Lee Henman @ March 17 2009, 4:07 PM GMT

but in the end I put myself in the Manager's shoes.

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From the size of you, you could have put your feet in the clowns shoes too!

Quote: Marc P @ March 17 2009, 4:07 PM GMT

Because it should have read.

CUT TO REVEAL A SAD CIRCUS CLOWN STANDING THERE. HE HONKS HIS HORN MISERABLY.

CLOWN:
What have I told you! I am the personnel manager, nobody gets hired without my say so.

HE HONKS THE HORN AGAIN.

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Hah, like it.

But the idea behind the sketch is that the local circus has gone under, leaving a load of circus performers suddenly unemployed. I originally had the idea of instead of a clown, it was a lion tamer standing there with a real lion. But because I'm trying to get this filmed by Funny Or Die I thought I'd better stick with the clown

The 'mysterious Russian stranger applying for a job' reminded me of a sketch in the first series of Little Britain - when a Russian man turns up to babysit.

http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=iQ47qMosKV4

Quote: Lee Henman @ March 17 2009, 4:11 PM GMT

Hah, like it.

But the idea behind the sketch is that the local circus has gone under, leaving a load of circus performers suddenly unemployed. I originally had the idea of instead of a clown, it was a lion tamer standing there with a real lion. But because I'm trying to get this filmed by Funny Or Die I thought I'd better stick with the clown

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Have you tried The Bearded Ladies??

Quote: Marc P @ March 17 2009, 4:09 PM GMT

From the size of you, you could have put your feet in the clowns shoes too!

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I only have small feet. Although I'd probably fit the clown's trousers.

Quote: Lee Henman @ March 17 2009, 3:59 PM GMT

Yes. I did.

I mean no, I didn't!

Cheers. What was it you didn't like about the ending?

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The thing is, I'm not sure.

It's just that the whole sketch builds well and has a funny feel to it and I guess I was expected something just a tadd more special to finish with but it was a bit of a let down in honesty.

But then I ask the question, if some one else had wrote this sketch would that ending be okay.

Or is it simply 'cos it's you and maybe I was expected something better because your own standards are normally so high.

Quote: Marc P @ March 17 2009, 4:07 PM GMT

Because it should have read.

CUT TO REVEAL A SAD CIRCUS CLOWN STANDING THERE. HE HONKS HIS HORN MISERABLY.

CLOWN:
What have I told you! I am the personnel manager, nobody gets hired without my say so.

HE HONKS THE HORN AGAIN.

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Marc pulls it out the bag!

No, no. Lee's ending is great. I was just being cheeky!

Quote: Marc P @ March 17 2009, 4:22 PM GMT

No, no. Lee's ending is great. I was just being cheeky!

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But it does give an unseen twist.

Another excellent sketch. Good use of language e.g. "the circus...she is finished". Funny visuals and misunderstandings. Just lovely. And like the poor sad honking clown at the end too.

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Another winner, Lee. Just one tiny thing; I agree with Tiggs re. the line:

STRONGMAN:
Oh, sorry. Force of habit.

I think this (or similar) would be better:

STRONGMAN:
Oh ... am sorry. It is habit - no?
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Quote: Morrace @ March 17 2009, 11:12 PM GMT

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Another winner, Lee. Just one tiny thing; I agree with Tiggs re. the line:

STRONGMAN:
Oh, sorry. Force of habit.

I think this (or similar) would be better:

STRONGMAN:
Oh ... am sorry. It is habit - no?
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He's a strongman not a monk!

Quote: Marc P @ March 17 2009, 11:19 PM GMT

He's a strongman not a monk!

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I sorry. I just arrive in lorry yesterday. Ish hard for British humour - No?

I'm still laughing.
I thought "Oh, sorry. Force of habit." was fine as it's near the beginning anyway so could probably get away with it.
If it's bothering though why not just use "Oh, sorry" on it's own or "Sorry, BAD Borovski"?

Must admit though I thought Marc's punchline was a pretty good ending.
ps. where can I buy this Sensual Relaxation CD?

Excellent, and the ending works very well.