Nice work, Random. Personally I'd prefer a plain reversal. There's something funny about having the girl doing the finger sniffing thing and acting like a big vulgar peacock while the man bawls and flaps off.
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Quote: David Bussell @ March 12 2009, 3:15 PM GMTMy only worry about reversing the roles is that it might come across a bit glib and "girl power!" That said, a crying man is just funnier than a crying woman.
Yeah. That occurred to me too, but I think it is possibly worth exploring, and male tears are somehow funnier.
Quote: Simon B @ March 12 2009, 3:49 PM GMTI agree with that ending. I'd morph a wank/ sucking off hand gesture (THEN HE CLOCKS HER) into the call me (telephone hand) i.e. in one fluid movement.
That is sucking brilliant!
I liked Randoms take. I think I'm with David though, no need to go the small willy/shit sex route (although I often go that route myself). I'd go with her boasting of the rampant sex they just had. but maybe that's just me.
Quote: David Bussell @ March 12 2009, 4:12 PM GMTNice work, Random. Personally I'd prefer a plain reversal. There's something funny about having the girl doing the finger sniffing thing and acting like a big vulgar peacock while the man bawls and flaps off.
Cheers Mr Bussell, yeah like the above, esp' how you've described her 'acting like a big vulgar peacock' 
Quote: random @ March 12 2009, 4:18 PM GMTCheers Mr Bussell, yeah like the above, esp' how you've described her 'acting like a big vulgar peacock'
Thank you for taking the time to offer a different take on it.
You're welcome 
Quote: random @ March 12 2009, 4:50 PM GMTYour welcome
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