Sitcom first half: please read...please

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Extremely funny!. In fact, much funnier than a lot of the so called 'comedies' I've seen on TV. I doubt if it will get commissioned though, because it is far TOO funny!!

thanks. hopefully you'll read the second half if I put it up at some point.

This didn't really do it for me, although I only scan-read parts. There's some half-decent lines here at times, but the whole thing feels a bit bantery without being particularly funny. Sorry.

All banter and no story. Back to the drawing board with this one.

It does have a slight storyline; it's just likely overly simplistic and dull. I realise the banter can ware thin if there isn't a story- so I should probably create strong stories then write around them. Anyway- thanks for your input.
Btw rob h- what parts did you like if any as far as lines are concerned? I know you said you only scan read it so don't worry if it's too much effort