deleted for rewrites and entry for comp
First Attempt at Stand Up
Bit of a mixed bag I thought. I particularly liked "I can see I've no friends here" and the lemon meringue bit, thought I think you could drop the "he's not your father" bit. Didn't really add much I thought.
The play dough joke I'm pretty sure is a Tim Vine joke, although the rest of the wife part sounded familiar. Might just be a similar style to someone though rather than same jokes.
Overall I'd say it's pretty good. Could do with dropping some bits here and there and a bit of polishing to do but if it's a first attempt that's to be expected.
thanks
Which comp is that?
It's a local members only one
Okay, cheers.
This is about the fourth post I've opened up and it says "deleted for re-writes" my life is pointless enough without opening threads that don't have a sketch. If people are going to do that can the whole thread be deleted so I don't have to waste time.
And another thing...(Rest of post deleted for re-write)
John
Purple Comedy http://standupcomedy.podomatic.com/
I saw this as well, which prompted me in a sheep like way to delete a few of mine, as I could not stand looking at them anymore. However, over the past few days I have begun to feel guilty about this, as for the moment they are still all on the first page of threads, and I can imagine it's bloody annoying.
I repent! I shall go and put them back up, edited or not.
Oh no, now I feel guilty for making you feel guilty. The shame of it.
We need someone who doesn't give a damn to post. Then we can all be happy and have someone to hate. wouldn't that be fun.
John
Purple Comedy http://standupcomedy.podomatic.com/
Quote: John Burns @ February 14 2009, 4:48 PM GMTOh no, now I feel guilty for making you feel guilty. The shame of it.
We need someone who doesn't give a damn to post. Then we can all be happy and have someone to hate. wouldn't that be fun.
John
Purple Comedy http://standupcomedy.podomatic.com/
Don't be so impatient, I was pissed when I put up my superb monologue then realised it could all be nicked, so deleted it, besides entering it for a comp, it can't be on a forum.
Quote: John Burns @ February 14 2009, 12:25 PM GMTThis is about the fourth post I've opened up and it says "deleted for re-writes" my life is pointless enough without opening threads that don't have a sketch. If people are going to do that can the whole thread be deleted so I don't have to waste time.
And another thing...(Rest of post deleted for re-write)
John
Purple Comedy http://standupcomedy.podomatic.com/
Annoying isn't it John - I keep an eye on things like this, I take note of people who do it, and if I get repeat offends I intend to PM them.
Little reminds everyone - post your stuff up and leave it up, if you're worried about people stealing your work you shouldn't put it up in the first place!!!
my previous post was my dark sense of humour Paul...doh