British Comedy Guide

Timmy goes shopping

Inspired by my next door neighbour and her son.

EXT. HOUSE - FRONT GARDEN - AFTERNOON

A MOTHER ANXIOUSLY AWAITS FOR HER SONS RETURN BACK FROM THE CORNER SHOP FOR THE FIRST TIME BY HIMSELF.

MRS SMITH WALKS BY AND STOPS TO CHAT.

MOTHER:
Hello Mrs Smith, how are you today?

MRS SMITH:
I'm OK thank you, how about yourself?

MOTHER:
I've just sent Timmy to the shops on his own for the first time.

MRS SMITH:
Oh they do grow up fast.

TIMMY RETURNS HOLDING A SIX PACK OF BEER.

TIMMY
They didn't have any wine gums, so I got these instead.

THE MOTHER AND MRS SMITH LOOK AT EACH OTHER IN SHOCK.

END

I initially was thinking about him being a middle aged man, but thought it was too obvious & unoriginal.

!

I was expecting him to be older - good twist from the expected.

Thanks David.

Laughing out loud

It made laugh.

Btw, great punch line!

Thank you!

I just entered this into the 4laughs comp and changed it a wee bit, opinions please :)

EXT. HOUSE - DAY

MARY AWAITS ANXIOUSLY AT HER FRONT DOOR.

HER NEIGHBOUR BETTY, STROLLS UP TO HAVE A CHIT-CHAT.

BETTY
Hello Mary, are you OK?

MARY
I've just sent young Timmy to the shops on his own, for the first time.

BETTY
Oh they do grow up fast.

TIMMY, A YOUNG BOY OF ABOUT NINE, COMES SKIPPING UP TO THEM, HOLDING A SIX-PACK OF BEER.

TIMMY
They didn't have any wine gums, so I got these instead.

MARY
You were supposed to get me some fags(SHE SLAPS HIM AROUND THE BACK OF THE HEAD.) stupid boy!

END.

V good... you've got yourself a good character there... lots too build on... i'd abuse it until you've gained every last comical laugh... i liked it... poor TIMMY... what the hell will he do next... i could see him doing a add for safety in fireworks... or possibly taking some kids camping with the scouts... Oh Timmy Timmy Timmy... what have you gone and done now.

Sorry Lee but I should've mentioned it before.

Coming back to Viz you should've changed the name. Timmy is Spoiled Bastard - as well as in Sorry!

Jeepers creepers... have VIZ done everything... how about a man with one leg longer than the other... blue curly hair... three arms... smokes camel cigars... and has a swearing disorder and dreams of being a cowboy... but can't because he's got six years left on his sentance... because if it has i'm F*C*U*K ed

Yep - he's called Limpalong Blue Tex and the smokey bastard!

Quote: Chavid @ July 12, 2007, 8:58 PM

Sorry Lee but I should've mentioned it before.

Coming back to Viz you should've changed the name. Timmy is Spoiled Bastard - as well as in Sorry!

Is Sorry! that thing with Ronnie Barker? 'cos Timmy is really a little boy and the focus has now shifted onto the mum.

But thanks for pointing them out anyway :D (through gritted teeth)

Cute, Leevil.

Quote: David Chapman @ July 12, 2007, 9:21 PM

Yep - he's called Limpalong Blue Tex and the smokey bastard!

LOL at 'the smokey bastard'

Can I slap you heartily on the back, Leevil? This is very good, short and sweet.

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