I've got a character in my sitcom, Gary, who's a bit of a dodgy 'wide boy'. He's trying to con someone out of something by tossing a coin. I was trying to think of an amusing line that Gary could say where both options are in his favour. The best I could come up with is "heads I win the book; tails you lose it". But I'm not entirely convinced by it. Anyone got a better line?
Thanks in advance.
He could say I'll toss a coin for it, and mean that the action of tossing a coin means he gets it.
Instead of it being heads or tails, the punchline could be, no it's a £1 coin.
Erm... go with Chris's.
Quote: Chris Forshaw @ January 4 2009, 3:27 PM GMTHe could say I'll toss a coin for it, and mean that the action of tossing a coin means he gets it.
Nice idea. Although I wanted Gary's deception to be a little bit more subtle.
Other guy gets out a pound coin.
OTHER GUY:
Do you want to toss me for it?
GARY:
(REACTS) No mate ,if it means that much to you. You keep it.
"I'll toss you for it. The lady comes up, I win, yeah?"
And he tosses a fifty pence coin with the Queen on one side and Britannia on the other.
Phil, stick to the feature films 
Quote: Marc P @ January 4 2009, 6:56 PM GMTOther guy gets out a pound coin.
OTHER GUY:
Do you want to toss me for it?GARY:
(REACTS) No mate ,if it means that much to you. You keep it.
I rejected that as an idea. Marc P, for shame.
"Heads I win, tails you lose" is ancient!
How about he suggests that if it lands on it's edge, he wins the book. Then he just throws it hard down at the ground so it sticks on it's edge in the mud.
Or says that if it's heads he wins. Then he just throws it at the other guy's head and claims a win.
Quote: Afinkawan @ January 5 2009, 12:53 PM GMTHow about he suggests that if it lands on it's edge, he wins the book. Then he just throws it hard down at the ground so it sticks on it's edge in the mud.
Or says that if it's heads he wins. Then he just throws it at the other guy's head and claims a win.
They both seem very aggressive. I'm not sure I'd want to watch such a thuggish character for very long.
Quote: Comrade @ January 4 2009, 3:18 PM GMTI've got a character in my sitcom, Gary, who's a bit of a dodgy 'wide boy'. He's trying to con someone out of something by tossing a coin. I was trying to think of an amusing line that Gary could say where both options are in his favour. The best I could come up with is "heads I win the book; tails you lose it". But I'm not entirely convinced by it. Anyone got a better line?
Thanks in advance.
It doesn't bode well if you can't think of a joke, though surely?
Didn't stop the writers of Lab Rats.
Quote: Seefacts @ January 5 2009, 5:13 PM GMTIt doesn't bode well if you can't think of a joke, though surely?
And it doesn't bode well that you can't say anything constructive, does it? Ever.
One line I asked about. One line I wasn't happy with. And then all you do is seek to undermine all my effort. Shame on you sir, shame. I wonder, in spite of being a successful writer, why you are so bitter? And I did think of a joke, just not one I liked.
For everyone else who has made constructive criticism, thank you.
Quote: Comrade @ January 5 2009, 6:16 PM GMTAnd it doesn't bode well that you can't say anything constructive, does it? Ever.
One line I asked about. One line I wasn't happy with. And then all you do is seek to undermine all my effort. Shame on you sir, shame. I wonder, in spite of being a successful writer, why you are so bitter? And I did think of a joke, just not one I liked.
For everyone else who has made constructive criticism, thank you.
'Successful'. Yeah, I wish.
A short bit of success, surely?