Hi, I've half thought of a sitcom over last couple of days or so & have come up with a rough first couple of scenes. Not 100% sure where this will go yet or even if it has potential. All comments/criticism on what I've done so far most appreciated.
EXT: Residential suburban street, all is quiet. A guy in his mid twenties walks along with a big rucksack. He pases a guy dressed like Dr Who (Tom Baker years.) who is working on a slightly modified Austin Metro. The guy gives Dr Who a slightly puzzled look before entering a nearby building.
INT: Open plan lounge/kitchen room in an old Victorian type house. Barry is sitting at the kitchen table reading a newspaper when Bill enters and dumps his rucksack on the floor.
BARRY: (Continues reading paper.) Good trip back from elfast university Bill?
BILL: (Glares at Barry.) You were supposed to pick me up from the airport Barry you twonk. By the time I'd forked out for a train ticket I couldn't afford a taxi from the station and so had to walk the last five miles.
Slight pause
BARRY: (Still readig paper.) So, good trip back from Belfast?
BILL: (Sighs in despair and plonks himself down in chair.) I suppose it could have been worse, at least I didn't have to walk all the way from the airport.
Just then Vivian (The Dr Who Guy.) breezes into the room and starts rummaging through the kitchen cupboards. Having found what's he's looking for (Some furry dice.) he wanders back outside.
BILL: What IS Vivian up to?! He's done some weird stuff to that Austin Metro of his; dark blue repaint, tinted windows and the word TARDIS painted down the nearside. Talk about Dr Who obsessed.
Vivian wanders back inside, grinning from ear to ear.
VIVIAN: Listen up guys, I've got something really important to tell you.
BARRY: (Hasn't stopped reading paper.) You've managed to catch up on the last 20 years in a few minutes and so are no longer stuck in the 80's.
VIVIAN: No. What? What you going on about? Anyway, the thing is, I have turned my Metro into a proper working TARDIS.
BILL: So, you've built a TARDIS?
VIVIAN: Yes
BILL: Using your Metro?
VIVIAN: That's right.
BILL
Oops, posted before I'd finished typing; not a goodthing to do :-)
VIVIAN: Listen up guys, I've got something really important to tell you.
BARRY: (Hasn't stopped reading paper.) You've managed to catch up on the last 20 years in a few minutes and so are no longer stuck in the 80's.
VIVIAN: No. What? What you going on about? Anyway, the thing is, I have turned my Metro into a proper working TARDIS.
BILL: So, you've built a TARDIS?
VIVIAN: Yes
BILL: Using your Metro?
VIVIAN: That's right.
BILL: At the risk of regretting asking this, why?
VIVIAN: Well if you're going to travel through time and space you might as well do it in style.
BILL: But an Austin Metro! And anyway, your car can't go further than about five miles before it claps out. You really expect me to believe that it can take us to different times and places when it can't even take us to the nearest supermarket?
VIVIAN: Well I'm telling you I've done it. Come and have a look.
I'm leaning towards it being more time travel comedy than travelling to different planets type thing. I'll possibly have them travelling to parrallel worlds and the such like as well.
What do you all think so far?