I've not sent anything to NewsRevue for a while so I thought I would have a crack at it again, and here's what I have come up with. Any good?
INT. HOSPITAL WAITING ROOM - DAY
A young husband and wife are sat waiting nervously. A doctor enters. Husband and wife stand up.
HUSBAND
Did they make it? Did you separate our girls?
DOCTOR
We lost Hope, but we still have Faith
Good stuff!
Very clever.
Quote: Chris Forshaw @ December 3 2008, 12:04 AM GMTI've not sent anything to NewsRevue for a while so I thought I would have a crack at it again, and here's what I have come up with. Any good?
INT. HOSPITAL WAITING ROOM - DAY
A young husband and wife are sat waiting nervously. A doctor enters. Husband and wife stand up.
HUSBAND
Did they make it? Did you separate our girls?
DOCTOR
We lost Hope, but we still have Faith
It's one of the better sketches I've read on here, probably the best in a while. Can you send stuff like this to NewsRevue as I have a hospital sketch too? But you'd need props to do it! I thought NewsRevue was just satire.
Of all the stuff surrounding this case....dads a bin man, they live with her mum, had their first kid when he was 25 she was 15, the religion thing......is the fact one kid is in the morge the best laugh?
Not a bad pun, but I think it's a simplistic laugh and point pun.
Wow, I wrote this before it was out that one of them had died, just that the op was under way. I even got the right one! Weird.
Cheers for the feedback gang.
Probably best not to write jokes that only have a life of a few hours....unless you just posted it here for a laugh?
Sorry, but I really didn't like this. It's nasty and cruel and not something to joke about.
Can I just add that I had no idea this was based on a news story. Knowing what I know now I'll say it's certainly clever but the joke has upped and left the building.
Quote: Dolly Dagger @ December 3 2008, 5:04 PM GMTSorry, but I really didn't like this. It's nasty and cruel and not something to joke about.
Quote: Chris Forshaw @ December 3 2008, 1:47 PM GMTWow, I wrote this before it was out that one of them had died, just that the op was under way.
It wasn't intentional.
I seem to have a nack for doing it as well (Madrid airport anyone?)
Chris!
Our very own (even more sinister) Mystic Meg.
Quote: Chris Forshaw @ December 3 2008, 5:30 PM GMTIt wasn't intentional.
I seem to have a nack for doing it as well (Madrid airport anyone?)
Oh dear! I thought your good sense filter was faulty.
Pretty nasty. I presume they were so named because their hold on life was precarious. So I don't see how the joke is in any way 'clever'.
They shared a liver! What were the chances of two surviving?
Let's not go over the top. He's said he wrote it before EXACTLY WHAT HE WROTE CAME TRUE... the spooky bastard. 
Anyway we've been through this 'what can we joke about' issue on so many threads already.