Stupid coppas

SCENE IS SET INSIDE A PANDA CAR, THE VIEW IS FROM THE BASK SEAT LOOKING THROUGH THE WINDSCREEN. IN THE FRONT SEATS ARE TWO POLICE OFFICERS. tHE CAR IS MOVING VERY SLOWLY AND BOTH OFFICERS ARE LOOKING VERY ATTENTIVE

SARGEANT
Ok constable are you sure it was round here

CONSTABLE
Yes sarg' this looks very familiar, turn right at the bottom of the road

SARGEANT
ok now what

CONSTABLE
Erm... left left and..... left again

SARGEANT
Are you sure? we could be driving around here all night

CONSTABLE
Just bare with me I know it's a long shot but we have to give it a try..... Turn right there by the church

SARGEANT
We've been doing this for hours, this is the last time I go with one of your bloody hunches,

CONSTABLE
Steady...steady.... BINGO! there she is

THE CAMERA PANS ROUND TO SHOW THE FRONT OF POLICE HEADQUARTERS.

I enjoyed the pay off, but I would lose all the dialogue from "and don't..." to "...for a piss", as it does not really add anything and deflects from the build up of suspense that is the key to the gag.

Quote: Timbo @ November 7 2008, 12:47 AM GMT

I enjoyed the pay off, but I would lose all the dialogue from "and don't..." to "...for a piss", as it does not really add anything and deflects from the build up of suspense that is the key to the gag.

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What he said.

I also felt a gentle pang of nostalgia - are they still called panda cars? I hope so.

Thanks for the feedback people, I have made the changes suggested.
And yes the reference to PANDA CAR was an intentional trip down memory lane for me.

Excelent like this modified version a lot.

How about he makes a big drugs bust on an evidence locker in a sequel?

If I knew what you meant Sooty J I would give it a try, please clarify

Sorry I meant that the stupid copper claims to have made a huge drugs bust.

It turns out he raided the stations own drugs evidence locker.

Very good