British Comedy Guide

On writing dialogue

Just happened by this advice by Mr Jacob. 'Tis good advice. You should read it.

In essence, the purpose of dramatic dialogue is to advance plot and illuminate character. In a comedy, dialogue should also be funny. Audience sitcom demands that it should be laugh-out-loud funny several times a page. Non-audience sitcom needs to maintain a level of funniness, and while one expects laughter, the frequency of laugh lines can be less. (If a non-audience sitcom is incessantly hilarious, then it should probably be made with an audience).

In thinking about the basic elements of comedy as the college scheme progresses, I find it impossible to avoid falling back on tradition, and the traditional view of dialogue is that every line should advance the story, just as every scene should have a point. In her talk to the last workshop, Susan Nickson cited John Sullivan as saying that if a show over-runs, cut the jokes, not the story. So it's worth considering the difference between funny lines and jokes.

At a commissioning meeting, discussing a script that I'm developing, I was told that there were too many jokes. This seemed a rather odd note for an audience sitcom, but what the comment meant was that there were too many obvious 'jokes', designed to get a laugh, rather than funny lines which would make an audience laugh, be true to the characters, and advance or comment on the story.

It should be absolutely clear in a script which character is speaking (there's an old reader's trick of blocking out character names and seeing if one can work out who is who from dialogue alone). Many new writers haven't quite mastered the art of different voices, so it feels that every character is speaking in the writer's voice, and that the characters have not been defined clearly enough. They are pawns rather than people.

Good dialogue is economical, with not a word wasted, and while dialogue should obviously convey information, it should be information with attitude rather than information alone. People telling each other stuff is dull, and people telling each other stuff that they should already know is just bad. Attitude is crucial.

The novelist Anthony Powell felt that one of the keys to avoiding the exposition trap was that questions should never be answered directly, which is a handy tip.

Clear characterisation leads to clear voices which allows actors to understand, and even add to, what they are being asked to play. Workshopping a script with a well-known actress was a tedious experience since she wanted to keep trying accents. The reason wasn't because the actress was being a diva, but because she couldn't grasp the character from the writing. When actors understand, they sell the words, even though they may not deliver them the way the writer heard them. But that's another story.

I think a useful thing to do - because I think it's very useful for people to analyse for themselves how things work - is to take a show that you like and that has worked for an audience - and examine the mechanism. Think about how characters have different voices, look at attitude, look at where the laugh lines come and look at how dialogue works with action and the physical.

Nah.

:)

Quote: Marc P @ November 4 2008, 11:43 PM GMT

Nah.

:)

You're right, the man knows f**k all.

Just as well he never reads any of this malarkey.

Apparently they are having a comedy college conference nest week on whether the big Sunday roast is called Sunday dinner or Sunday lunch.

Quote: Marc P @ November 4 2008, 11:48 PM GMT

Just as well he never reads any of this malarkey.

He knows I love him really. Not in a sexual way, obviously. Although the promise of a commission can do strange things to a man... :D

All good points.

"Too many [obviously stuffed in] jokes" is a problem with a lot of scripts I see posted online...and equally true of actual broadcast audience sitcoms, which is probably why so many of the latter annoy new/wannabe writers (a particular bugbear for me is when a weak or throwaway gag is accompanied by amazingly loud canned laughter due to overenthusiastic post-production work).

Quote: Lee Henman @ November 4 2008, 11:44 PM GMT

You're right, the man knows f**k all.

You've seen Thieves Like Us too then. ;)

I thought the old trampy guy in Thieves Like us was brilliant.

Quote: Marc P @ November 5 2008, 4:01 PM GMT

I thought the old trampy guy in Thieves Like us was brilliant.

Michael Jacob had a cameo? Unimpressed

When he said send some of your avatars round to his college - is the current one teaching there now then?

Quote: Marc P @ November 5 2008, 4:18 PM GMT

When he said send some of your avatars round to his college - is the current one teaching there now then?

Afraid not. The BBC's embroiled in enough scandals as it is.

Quote: chipolata @ November 5 2008, 3:47 PM GMT

You've seen Thieves Like Us too then. ;)

I liked Thieves.

Quote: Lee Henman @ November 5 2008, 6:19 PM GMT

I liked Thieves.

Ditto.

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