Invent-off

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INT. LAB – DAY

TWO INVENTORS, DOCTOR JENKINS AND DOCTOR SAMSON, FACE OFF AGAINST EACH OTHER WITH FLIPCHARTS.

DOCTOR JENKINS:
Observe my latest invention, Doctor Samson (FLIPPING HIS CHART)- the Automatic Duvet Stuffer, a wonder of modern science - patent pending.

DOCTOR SAMSON FLIPS A PAGE OF HIS CHART REVEALING SCHEMATICS FOR THE EXACT SAME INVENTION.

DOCTOR SAMSON:
Patented last week, old bean.

DOCTOR JENKINS:
Curse your spine, Samson! But no matter, you’ve yet to witness the unrivalled ingenuity of (FLIPPING CHART) the Cordless Extension Cord - patent…

DOCTOR SAMSON:
…pending?

HE REVEALS A BLUEPRINT OF THE EXACT SAME THING.

DOCTOR SAMSON (CONT):
Ancient history. Do try to keep up, Jenkins.

DOCTOR JENKINS:
Impossible! Yet I defy your hubris not to be punctured by this modern day masterpiece (FLIPPING CHART) – the Noiseless Velcro - paten…

DOCTOR SAMSON:
…Pended.

DOCTOR SAMSON PUTS A HAND TO HIS EAR AS HE OPENS AND CLOSES THE STRAPS ON HIS TRAINERS SOUNDLESSLY.

DOCTOR JENKINS:
Why, you perfect bastard! Still, I will have the last laugh as you recoil in rapt awe at the sheer majesty of…

HE FLIPS THE LAST PAGE OF HIS CHART REVEALING A DIAGRAM FOR AN IMMENSELY COMPLEX PIECE OF APPARATUS.

DOCTOR JENKINS (CONT):
…the time machine!

SAMSON FLIPS HIS CHART TO SHOW THE EXACT SAME INVENTION.

DOCTOR SAMSON:
Signed and sealed, my good man.

SAMSON WINKS AND JENKINS NARROWS HIS EYES SUSPICIOUSLY.

Works for me!
Nicely understated.

Very funny, and a lovely twist that pulls the whole sketch together as well as good characterisation.

I think you could have more fun with the inventions though.

Braille toilet paper? You can read the newspaper whislt you wipe your arse.

I do like it but it feels a bit linear. Maybe I'm overthinking it though, cos that would lead to a different sketch...

Dan

Quote: sootyj @ October 21 2008, 3:18 PM BST

I think you could have more fun with the inventions though.

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I think you're right there. Hmmmmm....

Quote: swerytd @ October 21 2008, 3:19 PM BST

I do like it but it feels a bit linear. Maybe I'm overthinking it though, cos that would lead to a different sketch...

Dan

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Well, of course non-linearity is expected where time travel is concerned. Trouble is, it was hard enough for me to wrap my noodle around this little number, simple as it is. Lord help me, I'm just not that bright. How those guys wrote Primer I'll never know.

Quote: JohnnyD @ October 21 2008, 3:16 PM BST

Works for me!
Nicely understated.

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Chos boz.

I really like the interaction between the scientists. Curse your Spine!! So I thought the build up was much funnier than the twist.

Brilliant.

Worked for me. I love it when a punchline has a twist that makes you reinterpret the sketch that has gone before.

Do you have a title for it?

Quote: Marc P @ October 21 2008, 5:26 PM BST

Do you have a title for it?

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Not really. I expect you have some though.

Lovely! Worked for me, agree with Timbo too.

n.b. warring flipcharts is a marvelous image.

This is great. One of your best IMO. The verbal sparring reminds me a bit of your writer interviews (in a good way) and it's all paid off in a lovely understated manner.

Thanks, guys, this is all very encouraging for a sketch I was really uncertain about.

Bit behind, sorry. I enjoyed it very much. Would agree with making more of the inventions though. Good stuff.