This the filmed version of a sketch I put up here the other week.
http://uk.youtube.com/watch?v=x-iiCV4ZmMo
I'm the one who looks like Tootsie...
Pensioner's party - the film
Very funny!
I've gotta say I wasn't a fan of this. The scripts predictable and linear.
The performance doesn't telegraph the jokes at all well, it kinda sounds like a couple of people preparing for a party.
If I hadn't read the original it would have been an effort to notice the drug innunendos.
Quote: Marc P @ October 20 2008, 3:04 PM BSTVery funny!
Thank you.
Quote: sootyj @ October 20 2008, 3:17 PM BSTit kinda sounds like a couple of people preparing for a party.
That was the point! I see what you're getting at, but I don't think it would have worked otherwise...
Made me giggle did that. Well done!
Nicely performed. I see where sootyj is coming from on the gags not being emphasised, but oddly enough I think those who are not familiar with the script will pick up on them more easily. I enjoyed the sketch more on a second viewing, which is always a good sign.
Thought it was funny and well done. Get the point about delivery, e.g. The two Ronnies' banter had a certain knowing style to it, but felt the "natural" conversational style worked well enough, and the acting itself was very good.
Thank you all for taking a look and your comments.
Had a bit of feedback from people who never saw the written sketch forst and seems it's gone down well and they got it.
Nicely done, Dolly - well done on getting this made.
Script good - performances great - the only weaknesses for me were on the technical side. It's obviously a dialogue-driven sketch and I think your recording equipment let you down. I know what was being said from the script but I'd have missed a couple jokes I'm sure if I hadn't read it.
I'd consider treating this as rehearsal and re-doing it with a decent mic.
Quote: David Bussell @ October 21 2008, 3:12 PM BSTI'd consider treating this as rehearsal and re-doing it with a decent mic.
Thanks. Know what you mean. We had to shout. It appears I can't fit an external mic to my camcorder. I could just starve the family and buy a new one.... 
Agree with David about the mic. Like the sketch though. I never read it to start with (bad me!) and don't think I've missed anything. Well done.
Dan
Quote: Dolly Dagger @ October 21 2008, 3:17 PM BSTI could just starve the family and buy a new one....
That would be my best recommendation.
Did you buy that joint specifically by the way?
Quote: David Bussell @ October 21 2008, 3:49 PM BSTDid you buy that joint specifically by the way?
That was dinner. It was rather delicious.
I don't remember seeing the original script on here so I came to this "blind". I thought it was very funny, and nicely performed too. The drug references worked fine for me. Nice work.
I enjoyed it. Feels like there may be a few more jokes to mine, and might be even stronger if you have a guest or two arrive. The payoff line would still go at the end of course....