Desert Island

Thinking about a mini series of these I'm not sure yet.

SCENE. EXT. DESERTED BEACH. DAY

2 men emerge from a plane, which has crashed on an island; both men look disorientated and injured.

STAN
Well this isn’t very good.

ED starts crying.

STAN
(Comforting) Don’t worry, it’ll be ok, the radio’s still working they’ll find us.

ED
It’s not that you fool, it doesn’t matter, nothing matters!

STAN
Why? What’s wrong?

ED
It’s… it’s the onboard DVD player it’s obliterated.

STAN
It’s ok we can get another one.

ED
(Still crying) No we can’t, the warranty expired… today!

STAN
Oh sweet Jesus no!!!

CUTS TO: Black background with “LOST” written across the screen.

END.

Yeah it's random and not very good but I'm bored.

did you do that off the top off your head if so that good

dont doubt yourself

im bored as well

Look at anorexics they are brilliant cooks, know all the calorie content of food they just cant tell you what it tastes like.

yeah I literally wrote it into the box... cheers Smith

Hi Paul

It's quite a good quickie. Think your punchline could have differed though:

-- ...DVD player is obliterated!
-- You mean we can't watch this (DISPLAYS 'LOST' BOXSET)!?!

If you see where I'm going.

Dan

Yeah that's a punchline that has a few things that can be done to it... sticking with a lost piss take, actually don't think I've seen a lost sketch as of yet.

Bo selecta

Short, Sharp and witty. Well done Mr Watson.

Cheers Charley

Yeah, alright.

Quote: paul watson @ June 14, 2007, 10:48 AM

Yeah it's random and not very good but I'm bored.

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Not very good? Paul, you do yourself an injustice.

I'm bumping this because it recently came fourth in a 4Laughs open script competition. My hat is off to you.

Had an improbability about it that, as 'humour', didn't sit comfortably with me ... has potential as general idea but not particularly exploited yet in my opinion.